Dark Trader

Birds. That's my single inspiration for this new piece. Enjoy.!

The kingdom of birds has beauty,
It has songs of delight,
As 🕊️ birds fly or sit,
Their beauty holds no respite,

They preen,
They fight,
They feed,
Take flight,
Battle rivals,
Sometimes play,

Are they really just birds?,
Or nature's way,
Of reminding god's children,
That life is a play?,

A play of what we make it,
Within or outside of our communities,
Unlike the birds,
Human beings fail key duties,

Duties to one another,
Duties to colleagues and kin,
Duties to sisters and brothers,
No surprise at the state that we're in?,

Be more like the birds,
Free from sin..!

Author's Note

Any meanings which you took from this piece? Did you grasp all of the meanings and symbolism, which I intended..?

Reviews

[Fia Naturie]

This is an interesting piece of work. I do love rhyme schemes.
Birds in flight are freedom. The nature of just being instinctual is a sort of freedom in itself. God does not restrain us; we restrain ourselves to the manmade dollar to have freedom, which is a God-given gift.
I believe the innate want Of the bird to demonstrate prowess to entice the female is a sin. One of the seven, I think. “Lust”, maybe?

[Twilight]

Indeed. We were given free will, as stated within Christian theology; so God is never portrayed as an entity which controls mankind. It's a given, that people will make moral mistakes; including acting upon instinct. In verse two, I listed several bird behaviours; which superficially mirror some human behaviours (I could have included more). Regarding "flight", people have a tendency to take flight for a whole plethora of reasons. By coincidence, I remember writing a poem called "Lust Or Trust"; having noticed your reference to lustful behaviour. Feel free to look, if it's listed amongst my writings. If you don't see it, I might have written on paper only. The way in which a male bird will seek to demonstrate prowess, is of course part of nature; when mating is due to take place. But, demonstrating that prowess is really a form of boasting or showing off; so vanity would possibly be the form of sin in this context? The passionate lust happens later, Fia; after the feckless male has finished showing off lol. Well, I'm sure that you've met plenty of guys with bird brains..! Anyway, I will remain open to "read requests". And, your quite detailed review is acceptable.

[Samuel Dickens]

You make a good point. I love to watch birds and other animals being themselves, playing about. Hummingbirds drinking nectar. Robbins tending their nests. (I'll forgo watching lions devouring a hyena) They are entirely without fault. (sin?) There's a lot about them to envy. Also to make comparisons to ourselves. I think I understand this pretty well.

[Twilight]

Thanks, Samuel. That's good to read.

[MsJewel]

I love the message you have shared. Yes, it would be a lovely world if all were free from sin. I could hear the sweet song of birds chirping as I read your words :) Julie

[Twilight]

Thanks. I had the title of Dawn Trader in mind, before I'd even decided exactly what to write. It's a term sometimes used, in regard to financial traders on the stock market etc. In my imagination, I compared that with birds; "trading" over scraps of food or seed (at dawn).

[Enigmatic Amor]

I enjoyed the juxtaposition of bird and man. Though the addition of God and sin seemed clunky, taking away from the flow. Perhaps the point could be made in a more refined way? As I sit watching the hummingbirds while having my coffee, I see the connection to nature and God’s beauty. Perhaps, we can be more like them. Nice premise, food for thought.

[Twilight]

Yes, thankyou for such thoughtful praise. Keep writing yourself.! I take "read requests" too here. Best wishes.

[Shadow Blue]

It’s a poem which asks one to think.I like the way it compares simple animals with people to the latter detriment,so often well deserved.

[Twilight]

Quite so. Despite all of that, there remains the ongoing additional necessity; to ensure that our needs come first. And, to help ensure that our world's dwindling resources are used wisely. Indeed, "reality bites".

[Soren]

We as humans tend to, in our arrogance, judge ourselves suppior to other life forms but in fact we may not be even equal. A great message and well written

[Twilight]

Thankyou, Soren. Indeed, you mentioned living in a tropical rain forest; so no surprise that you appreciate nature's birdlife..?

[Soren]

All flora and fauna are sacred to me

[Twilight]

I see. Indeed, you must adore nature's natural beauty. Of course, it should also be nurtured; when we're best able to. A difficult challenge in today's world, with so many people placing so many demands upon our planet's precious resources.?