Lament

They catch themselves in their sessions of depression,

Swallowing their pills; giving away their possessions.

 

The bridges are high and the fall has no end.

Their days continue; their hearts never mend.

 

Tears turn to blood and the stains leave their mark,

Consuming the lights and possessing the dark.

 

Their dreams are riddled with flashes of death,

They suck back a sigh

And breathe their last

breath.

Author's Note

I've been fiddling with this for some time. Let me know what your thoughts are! Does the picture add or detract from the poem? Is the ryhme and flow good? Does it make you feel anything? Your comments mean the world to me!

Reviews

[Chris Micha]

This is dark and genius. I really like this piece, Margo. You are able to catch suicidal thinking in short detail and still express it in a massive way. Whether it be depression or another reason the jumper jumped, doesn't matter, and you made sure to link it to darkness.

Bravo dear poet! :)

[Margo Seuss]

Thank-you, my friend. :) I appreciate the review!

[Zakari Schmidt]

I really like the buildup and last line cutoff, ends your flow in motion. Lets it touch deep. Awesome

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

This is such a great capture of that desperation that is felt by those with a death wish. Your choice of WORDS is masterful. Every one of them is the best choice for every great line. I am terrifically impressed of the way this flows and you truly hit the mark! Very good write.

[G. Cedillo]

I like this succinct nature of this and the quick glimpses/snapshots or sketches of the symptoms of depression without getting into a narrative or being too descriptive. I think getting away from any pronouns would be a good choice here> no "They" in the beginning or "their," to make it even more stark. Like a still life, ironically. It will create a more mysterious feel and a question of who is speaking, why is this being said... it will be that much more ominous. And the picture is nice, maybe move it after the poem.

great read, thanks

[ms. barrie]

this is incredible, Margo! Your pen reached very depths
inside one's psyche spiraling down to the utter despair,
where one feels that life has just sucked
them dry. they can no longer be repaired, their hopes
Just illusions...

brilliant rhyming scheme and flow/meter. most can relate
To this. goes into my favs :)))

[Margo Seuss]

I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I don't usually write poetry this serious.

[ms. barrie]

I did, it's heart wrenching I can very much relate to it...And you
expressed this topic very intelligently and with empathy.
Well your titie poem...was hysterical and everyone could use a laugh
now and then. I will be sure to visit more often! :)))

[Margo Seuss]

Every once in a while, when I'm in the right mood, I'll write a serious piece. My other serious poems include "Good-bye" and "The Sword of Zalanzabar."

[M.W. Griffith]

Finding poems like this reminds me of how much work I need on crafting my own. It's genius, masterfully told, and simply scatters emotion onto the page to a degree that makes me rather jealous. :)

[Margo Seuss]

Good lord! You're far too kind! Many thanks! Honestly, you've just made my night! I'm sure you're just being modest about your own work. I'll have a looksie at your poems and give you some advice. Thanks again for your review! Too kind! Too too kind!

[M.W. Griffith]

I'm glad that I made your night, and no, I am not exercising modesty as far as my own poetry goes. The truth of the matter is that my strength is in long fiction, novel length, but I've always wanted to write poems and short fiction better. I just never had much of a knack for it. It's a joy to read someone of your quality, so many thanks to you. :)

[Margo Seuss]

To be honest, poems aren't usually what I enjoy writing either. I just recently started writing them. Check out some of my short stories in Undertakings of an Undertaker if you're interested. Feel free to send me some requests for your short stories and I'll be sure to leave some reviews.

[M.W. Griffith]

I will read them. I sent you a request for my only other poem, Floods. Yeah, I only have two lol What got you into poetry btw?

[Margo Seuss]

I really haven't a clue what got me into poetry! I've always loved writing raps (which are pretty much poems verbalized in a rythmic slangy sort of way). One day I just randomly started scrawling poems in a fancy notebook (I figured because the notebook was fancy that I should use it for something good like poetry and not lame school notes). Then I got into this site and now I write poetry!

[M.W. Griffith]

And we are glad you do. :)