Cosmic Discharge Pt. 1 - 2U

This Embrace

Is All I Have

If I've offended you-

You've been holding me Down

 

This Energy

Burns inside

Wasted in me

.burns me alive.

 

These Miracles

of Which I've always craved; 

Today I set Them Free

Free of Being Wasted on Me.

 

I'm Fighting For

a Blinding Light

But The Fists I Make

Are Too Tired to Swing 

 

Revive Me

Prove You Exsist

Cause I've Been Proving to you

I deserve all Gifts That you Give 

 

Revive Me

Prove You Believe in Me

'cause I Believe In you

Believe Enough to free you of Me

Reviews

[Richard Layne]

Tundra, i really like what you've written here. There's this calm confident cockiness that comes through. Your writing is really concise and your ideas clear. i like the repitition of revive me in the final two stanzas. The only thing i'm not sure is who is "you"?

[Blue Ivory]

Great! Can't wait to see the rest of the parts!

[Kim's Poems]

Loved the powerful emotions protrayed.
awesome write

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

These Miracles

of Which I've always craved;

Today I set Them Free

Free of Being Wasted on Me.
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good writing.....best wishes.