Please Open Your Eyes

You must remember who I use to be. For everything fades of you, except your love.

I see you,
Watching me,

Do you see me,
Watching you?

Do you know me?

Your scent,
Follows me home,

I remember us,
Like an addict,
Remembers its fix.

You watch where I've been,
What I've done,
You've studied my insides.

As I sit in my room,
You are faintly besides me,

I know I fucked up,
I know you can see the blood.

As you look at my open wrists,
You look at me.

I miss your voice,
I miss your touch.

I need you to fade from my memory,
Be done with me,
For your haunting I no longer can take.

I need you,
But you don't want me,
I love you,
But you hate me.

I'd rather die knowing I left you wanting me,
Than to die without purpose of living.

But none of that matters.
You don't see me anymore,
You see right through me,

Past our use to be secret messages,
For I am now your ghost,
That you no longer believe in.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Interesting to read. I don't normally like color when I read poetry but the difference in colors works for this poem. I find it interesting that you called an addict an "it" rather than a "her/him" in the lines "Like an addict, / Remembers its fix". I know it's rather subtle but I enjoy it when I pick up on things like that, it gives a great tone to the poem by using that.

I did notice an error, in the line "You are faintly besides me," beside shouldn't be plural in this line.

I also normally hate when people put those lines through their lines in their poetry, but again it suited the poem. I liked the poem despite hating it because I have very particular opinions on suicide and how it is one of the most stupid actions a human can commit. But even with that, this was a well written poem filled with emotions that were greatly displayed through words, structure and form. Well done!