Your murder: Public Pool

You are enjoying your ride to the public pool in the back of your friend's car.

Your favorite song is playing and everyone is singing along. 

You look out the window as your singing and see a dark woman walking on the sidewalk.

She has long black hair that covers her face and pale skin. 

She looks your way for a split second as you drive by. 

You didn't get to see her facial features, and for some odd reason you think she has no features. 

Soon this moment is boggled out of your head when the driver, your best friend, declares arrival. 

Your friends persuade you to jump right in, but you decide to go to the bathroom first.

Putting down your things you head towards the public bathroom.

You open the door and it feels abnormally cold for July.

You look around and nobody's in their with you.

You look under the last stall and see grimy feet with black dirt crusted on the toes.

You quickly go into the next stall.

You look over to the next stall, but the feet aren't there anymore.

Instead they're right in front of the stall door waiting for you to come out.

You slowly open the door slowly with your heart beating uncontrollably.

 You see the same dark woman you saw on the sidewalk with her features still hidden under her hair.

You scream, but that is all you can do before she draws out a gun just as grimy as her.

She points it at your head and tells you to keep quiet. 

You do as you are told in fear you may be killed. 

"You killed my son." The woman belts.

You are dumbfounded as she tells you this, but before you can protest she pulls the trigger. 

Your dead. 

Reviews

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

Loved it. Did the victim really kill her son?

[J. Hampton]

Again... bravo

I like this almost as much as the "cliff" - murder
You have a "Rod Serling - Twilight Zone" flair ...you know .
a bit of technical error... but could no doubt be expanded to a nice lil tale of horror/suspence

Blessssssssssssss

[teenagekween]

COOL!

[Mintwhiskers]

this is book worm again. why do you keep killing me?!?!?!?!

[Chaos]

Wow!

I love the images you gave to this one. I kept feeling the woman on the sidewal that your character saw was spirit to carry him/her to death. You know how angels are described as gaurdians to protect and guide for celestial ways? I kept thinking this figure was a guide to the underworld; death.


Great write!