"Will you always be there?
Will you be there to share?"
if it was me, i would put here instead of there...
as the word there feels like your dear is far away, not somewhere close (physically or in the heart)...
here would show that he/she is close by, able to share your feelings, your pain your burden
It seems pretty much a completed composition. There are times we reach a point in a poem's genesis where it could no longer be tweaked. Then we move on to the next appointment of sorts with our Muse.
When someone leaves us alone why is it that we feel selfish for wanting them back. Yet even in that deep pain of abandonment we try to put them before our own self. This is a very good write~
I really like this, Greg! Especially right now in my life, this means so much to me. So often have I repeated a plea like this in my head. This is short and sweet and gets right to the point.
"Will you always be there?
Will you be there to share?"
if it was me, i would put here instead of there...
as the word there feels like your dear is far away, not somewhere close (physically or in the heart)...
here would show that he/she is close by, able to share your feelings, your pain your burden
Hi all I dont like writing about myself so I will be brief. I am 16 and I live in Fallbrook Ca.
How much more brief can you get?
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