Words With Power

Self explanatory, right?

If these words were just enough
To end my life for good
My hand would cramp so fast
No longer misunderstood

I'd scribble in my grave
And note myself in white
I'd write in my few last words
Show them how I've had to fight

If these words could change my tears
Into waves of ocean's blue
I could flood the entire world
And we could all just start brand new

So we wouldn't have to hurt
And never have to cry
We could all live life in peace
If I could, I'd like to try

If these words could just erase
All the dumb things that were made
You and I would surely notice
That these words would start to fade

But if hope is what we yearn for
Then we best not try to miss
The whole point of lovely words
Is hope we can't dismiss

Author's Note

Does it only make sense to me?

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Very good, darlin'!

You sing, right? This poem is SO a natural lyric begging to be sung.

"If these words could change my tears
Into waves of ocean's blue
I could flood the entire world
And we could all just start brand new"

Those lines especially jump out at me, and they really stand strong in the annals of song lyrics. Oops! Whitney's words started a tsunami! Quick build an ark!

Such ablution imagery is recurrent in ideas of renewal, or baptismal blessing.

This poem is poignant and durable, can double as a song lyric, has archetypal values, and is a VERY auspicious effort -- especially from one so young!

Excellent work, and I look forward to more of your writing.

[unspokenguilt]

I love it...it's bold and full of emotion! Yeah, the world can be cruel but it's our choice to make it better.
There are many times when life may seem like a number of difficulties and an limited count of yays, so it's best to remember the yays...but also to live in the now :)

Great write and best wishes!
-elyssa-

[Ian]

No, God...I can understand perfectly what you're saying. It's a beautifully conceived poem. Obviously, full of sadness, but passion as well. I'm going to save this one.