Words With Power

Self explanatory, right?

If these words were just enough
To end my life for good
My hand would cramp so fast
No longer misunderstood

I'd scribble in my grave
And note myself in white
I'd write in my few last words
Show them how I've had to fight

If these words could change my tears
Into waves of ocean's blue
I could flood the entire world
And we could all just start brand new

So we wouldn't have to hurt
And never have to cry
We could all live life in peace
If I could, I'd like to try

If these words could just erase
All the dumb things that were made
You and I would surely notice
That these words would start to fade

But if hope is what we yearn for
Then we best not try to miss
The whole point of lovely words
Is hope we can't dismiss

Author's Note

Does it only make sense to me?

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

Very good, darlin'!

You sing, right? This poem is SO a natural lyric begging to be sung.

"If these words could change my tears
Into waves of ocean's blue
I could flood the entire world
And we could all just start brand new"

Those lines especially jump out at me, and they really stand strong in the annals of song lyrics. Oops! Whitney's words started a tsunami! Quick build an ark!

Such ablution imagery is recurrent in ideas of renewal, or baptismal blessing.

This poem is poignant and durable, can double as a song lyric, has archetypal values, and is a VERY auspicious effort -- especially from one so young!

Excellent work, and I look forward to more of your writing.

[bluessadmood]

Oh what loveliness,how strong these words are,but how lovely the meaning behind them
I would scribble on my grave a note in white,write my last few words,tell them how I had to fight
wished these words to change my tears into waves then I would flood the world and maybe we could all start anew..
These are wonderful words,very strong words..how I loved this
lovely write

[John A Common]

It comes off like a really good song. Very cool poem.

[luke312]

With your eyes so blue and thoughts of peace in your head, wishing to start a new is a story that's well read
I understand this poem it's special indeed but not every one will think like you and me

very righteous poem

[Xavier Honre]

Great poem! I liked how it flowed and rhymed with ease. It seems like you didn't have to try very hard to get a piece that sings to one's heart. Bravo!

[Kevin Vorshak]

Very nice, Whitney. And you're right, it is different than mine. Most definitely deeper in thought. The part that really stands out to me is:

If these words could change my tears
Into waves of ocean's blue
I could flood the entire world
And we could all just start brand new

The entire poem flows really well and, yes, it makes sense to me as well.

[Dempsey Wilson (D.L. Wi..]

Beautiful words, Whitney. It made sense to me, too! I especially liked the part: "If these words could change my tears into waves of ocean's blue, I could flood the entire world and we could all just start brand new." Very well done! Excellent poem!

[Wunderlich]

Only a machine wouldn't be able to extract the message from this poem. This is a feeling I'm sure most people have at some point in their life. Love your word choice and structure.

[Kaotic Barbie]

I love your writing. It just reminds me of how i feel and its exactly how i would put it into words.

Amazing :-)

[Satchmo's Gal]

I wish I could count the times I felt this way... This was a poem full of depth and color even though the world is gray... I love it.