What I saw Today

(Today)

Today I saw a fish

Yesterday I saw death

Tommorow I'm going to see me

 

 (Yesterday)

Today I saw death

Yesterday I saw you

Tommrow I'll see a fish

 

 (Tommrow)

Today I saw me

Yesterday I saw a fish

Tommrow I'll see life

 

 (Today)

Today I saw life

Yesterday I saw me

Tommrow I'll scrape a knee

 

 (Tommrow)

Today I scraped a knee

Yesterday I saw life

Tommorw I'll go scene

 

 (Yesterday)

Today I went scene

Yesterday I scraped a knee

Tommrow I'll tell you that you just wasted time reading a stupid poem I hate >:D

 

Author's Note

Tell me who read it all. Be honest. OH! Did you laugh or get a little angry that you wasted your time?

Reviews

[Archia]

I gotta laugh at that last line, I really gotta. It was really confusing, I was thinking there some some paradoxial thing to it or something, but I actually get it know. Oh I can't get over that last line, I loved it. I think it was a great idea. And hey, it didn't waste my time at all, it gave me a laugh.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and I like the surprise ending. Thank you for the entertaining poem to read. A excellent poem.
Coyote

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i love the mixed pattern, very nice

[Rik B]

funny, i stopped after the third, then read your note and went back to finish. great.

[Popble]

AMGMBULKILK This poem is a trap! That last line!

[Shy Girl]

Well I could ask you "then why did you write it?" But as it so happens I thought it was very unique ... very much so. I had to look closely to follow "scene" stanzas but that's alright I was laughing by the time I got there and that...jokes on me...was near the end. :) Really it was very unique if you truely read it and took each piece as it came. You included each everything in reverse and flipped also you tensed them differently as well...that does take an extremely good eye..That for one: you know what you're doing.. and two: what you just wrote so you don't repeat it and loose the entire effect. Brilliant job :) Honestly :) lol this was priceless

[Suze]

I liked it until you said I had just wasted my time, ya jerk!! lol - next time I'll read the end first!!!

:)

[patricia]

i enjoyed it immensely, i didn't realise what was happening at first, it made me think how easy it is to write historical fiction because we have all the background knowledge, and can pretend it is happening now. The idea behind your poem was very interesting. Thanks...and yess...not so much laugh but it cheered and made me smile.

[xSamilynnx]

lolz this is awsome xD xD i love it!!!!

[R J Askew]

But I am tomorrow and have not happened yet, so I can't read it until then :)))

Great playful write. I smiled.