Senses

My last poetry before I closed my account.

I sing of resolution;

Love notes passed silently.

I hear determination's whisper;

Hearts beating together.

I smell scents of smiling;

With only one glance.

I taste passion's kiss;

Four lips temptation.

I feel a smooth touch;

Rose petal fingers.

I see a lover's reunion;

 

Still,

      But,

          Because,

                  Darn!

                         It's in the future...

                  Still,

           Though,

    Despite,

Yes!

 

I sing passion's song;

Melodies of progress.

I hear a whisper of success;

Crumbling of great walls.

I smell happiness wafting;

Smiling from a small sniff.

I taste tomorrow's desire;

A day passes quickly.

I feel so close;

Gentle kisses on the cheek.

I see a lover's life;

 

Still,

      But,

          Because,

                  Darn!

                         It's in the future...

                  Still,

           Though,

    Despite,

Yes!

 

Just maybe...

 

If I sing, 

          hear, 

               smell, 

                     taste, 

                           feel, 

                                see...

  Is it really in the future?

        Or is it now?

                            Or is it...

        Could it be...

                            But no...     

      I'd never admit it...                     

                            It might be...

 

                Maybe it's just me... And I imagined it all. 

 

     No. It can't be. Why? Because...

 

You know what...

                  It's happened...

                                    Unavoidable...

 

      Just me has become...

                             Just her...

      Just her has become...

                             Just me...

      The world has become... 

                             Just us...

 

      One.

Reviews

[Melissa M.]

I like the tone of this poem, but the formatting does nothing for me. In face it was a little bit of a snag in the overall flow for me. I think it was just too distracting. It could be that the words used to go out of line were not necessarily monumental. Though they seemed like a chorus of sorts, they still read as disjointed thoughts, especially at the end. That almost hurt the poem I think.
I do like the beginning though, before you got into the creative formatting. Speaking of all of the senses once love takes over the body. Really good writing there.

[Stacy A. Foster]

This sings of romanticism. Nicely done and very uplifting!

[Ebby]

Oh Benjamin, I think you are in love. Welcome!
This is a very thoughtfully written and well constructed poem which paints a masterpiece in so few words.
Thank you for posting it for us to read. Kind regards. :)

[Bubo]

You have a beautiful soul and your flow allows us to see the beauty, joy and how much you take from life, the hope you feel. So much gentle emotion conveyed and as the words flowed, the beauty of the layout reeled me in even closer.

I smell happiness wafting;

Smiling from a small sniff.

I taste tomorrow's desire;

A day passes quickly.

I feel so close;

This tells me you are closer to holding what you desire and love, be it a person or life in general ( I could be wrong), I loved "smiling from a small sniff"......

You know what...

It's happened...

Unavoidable...

Ah........your in love :))
The build up was exceptional........stunning...........I read it at least four times!And as you conclude, you are as one.................I loved the almost glee as you questioned, "is it"?
I am by no means a good critic! But I know what I love and feel, and I felt every word of this and loved it for its lightness and beauty!

This is a smile!!!

Still,

But,

Because,

Darn!

It's in the future...

Still,

Though,

Despite,

Yes!

[Carmen]

Oh it's so nice! I really liked the flow and sweetness of this poem. (and i'm so glad i could be of inspiration to you!)