Electricity

My body tingled
When she smiled at me, bolted
Electric
I am her lightning rod

Reviews

[Benarsi]

Amazing poem for 20 seconds :) Your choice of words and flow are magnificent...What a write!

B.

[Brianna Brie]

This makes me feel really good like lightning. Great write in so few words.

[Niki Nonsense]

i like the last line the most. you're one of the 10 finalists for the top three of the short contest.

[Bubo]

Nice........that you can ignite such a response, and choice of words are perfect to describe that.
Zap........might have been nice to see that somewhere in here!

[L. L. Jacobson]

Description: Zap! I wrote this in 20 seconds, like a lightning bolt.

my response: (not surpised by your astounding talent)

You did????
...then it came from your heart. LIGHTNING ROD.
This is phenomenal in its short breath.

[Alex Dagger]

This is an interesting poem... nice flow