Touch The Sky

Something I Hope I Will Do Someday...

 

Touch The Sky

 

By: Brian "Fade" Galvez

Do you not think life is so challenging?

So many obstacles around every bend

The pain and sorrow are neverending

Soon hate will bring our world to its own end

 

Poverty lies within our great cities

Where people kill each other for some weed

The rich hide while the poor sleep in trees

I cannot believe all the peoples greed

 

But a flicker of light in the darkness

May finally bring this troubled world peace

Can annihilate all the selfishness

Greed will not matter at the very least

 

Kids of tommorow are ready to fly

To spread their wings and toch the sky

Reviews

[LostCauze[:P]]

Work on your rhythm and rhyme scheme. Try to keep a pattern, dont let the rhyme scheme become un-neat therefore it creates confusion in your lines that throws off both rhythm and flow of your poem. Keep writing. Make friends and review there poems and they will review yours.