Prologue

     in the dream, i am walking down a street in the middle of nowhere, wearing my faded hunter green Jeff Buckley tank top and a black crushed velvet peasant skirt with my long straight blonde hair loose on my shoulders. it's warm, but not too hot, and the sun is high in the sky. My sunglasses shield my blue-grey eyes from the sun. it's dusty and my bare feet are getting dirty, but i don't care, as usual. i'm wearing my usual dozen woven friendship bracelets in random colors, and my sterling silver ring with tiny star-shaped imprints in the metal. My old worn field bag is slung over my shoulder.

     in the dream, there's the shell of a brick building that was a mechanic's shop in the middle of nowhere. The sign is faded and it's empty. Almost. There's a van inside. Kimber, my blue and white Volkswagen camper van. There's also a guy, but when i wake i can never remember exactly what he looks like.

     in the dream, we take a road trip. That Volkwagen has all our worldly possessions in it, but even if we don't have much it doesn't matter. We have the world as our backyard. We can go anywhere or do anything. We have maps stapled together and taped to one window and stickers marking the places we've been. When it's sunny, the sun shines through the map and you can see the lines on the floor of the van.

     in the dream, i know that i'm understood. i know that i'm safe. i know that i'm free. And it's the best feeling i've ever had.

 

 

 

...The thing is...no matter how great the dream is, you always have to wake up.

Author's Note

This will probably be edited later. Keep in mind i never capitalize my i's and put three ?'s and !'s. OCD.

Also, i don't know what's up the add hyperlinks, but ignore them. i DiD NOT put them there and they're kinda ticking me off.

Reviews

[~Lizzy♬]

It's a decent start. I also am bothered by the non-caps. So it's a very good description of the dream she had. :)

I like the repetition of "In the dream". Gives it an almost surreal feeling.

I know that other folks would probably criticize for having too much detail, but I like it. I like to know exactly what someone is wearing.

[Kloud_Nine]

A pretty decent start, the non-caps sorta bother me but whatever. Kinda short but hey it's a prologue right?

In case I didn't make my point, I enjoyed it.

[Havatara]

The description was really good in this, but a lot of the sentences started with 'i' and it became repetitive after a while, and when you were describing her clothes you could have said what she looked like, too, but it's great the way it. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

[poetic-raven2012]

:) i like this so far. it kinda reminds me of these poems i was doing, protesting the capitalization of the letter i :) i really like the descriptions in the 1st and 3rd paragraphs