Music

The music pounds,

An artificial heart.

It beats and sends

My blood pounding.

It keeps me alive.

Can you feel it,

The beat controlling,

Pounding,

Vibrating.

Making you move along

With it.

Forcing your thoughts away

And filling your head

With only the need...

The need...

To dance.

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Love the passion and flow of this one.. music sooo inspires me .. each and every day! You have put together exactly what it can do.. the sweet rhythm pulsating through every inch of a person's mind, body and spirit.. giving us that inspiration and vibe to dance!!! Music is truly refreshing.. an escape to another world.. I love so many artists and the great lyrics some so creatively put together! This is a great tribute to the feel of music.. thank you so much for sharing! =)

[Jae]

i disagree with the one dude. its a very amazing poem. if you think about it you know y the music makes you want to dance and y it flows through your veins...its like an escape..
i love it...
your twin

~Rem

[V. Lucien Maier]

solid, but uninspired in MY opinion, the time poem I reviewed you reached in and really addressed your feelings,
Here you are playing very lightly.
Music makes you want to dance but why?
it flows through your vains? but why?
that is how you pull a reader in you need your reader (especially with poems)
to say "THAT IS HOW MUSIC HITS ME!" then they will be locked into the piece.
Don't take it bad though, I just already know you can do better.