Shaken and Scared

this is a poem about anxiety attacks and what one feels like

Shaken and Scared -

Unsure of what?

Unclear picture hidden,

Behind my eyelids -

Like the elusive Fairyland,

Hidden just out of reach.

Shaken and Scared -

Unsure of what?

Pulse races,

Palms sweats,

Breath quickens,

Shaken and Scared -

Unsure of what?

Filled with Fear -

Gut Wrenching,

Like a Dragon -

Stomach full of firestones,

And no target to aim its' flame!

Shaken and Scared -

Unsure of what.

Author's Note

Please feel free to give productive critics and reviews. I am a freestyler on some of my poetry. I know about stanzas and metering, I don't always choose to use exact meters. I also know about punctuation. I like the punctuation I used, but if you truly feel there was better use of punctuation, let me know, we can agree or agree to disagree.

Reviews

[Walker Andreasen]

Interesting piece. The flow is perfect, but I'm I feel as though you could have been more descriptive. My other thought is that if you're going to end this piece with just the two lines, maybe do it more matter of factly? Through out the poem you after asking the question you described what you're unsure of. So(personally) as the reader when you end the poem with the same question I'm waiting for more. Maybe you could just change that question mark to a period. But that's just my opinion. Also, filled not felled. Unless you meant felled but then it would be fallen. So... I think you meant filled. Good write though!

[TrinityHawk]

Thank you Walker for your critic. I appreciate what you had to say, and take it under consideration. Yes, indeed, I meant filled *smile*. I will fix that right away. Thank you again.

[Walker Andreasen]

You're welcome! Keep writing the things of your soul!

[Baby Ricochet]

I liked it. My knowledge of poetry consists of Marine Corps chants and Rap so I'm gonna assume the way this poem's structured is spot on whatever spot it's supposed to be on.