There is a wind upon the heath dear.

There is a wind upon the heath dear.

A Poem by TrimarcoRansome

There is a wind upon the heath Dear

Upon it I hear you whisper,

I feel you on and around my skin

A mirage my mind to picture.

 

Your words  so wise within their guise

Your soul and spirit roam free,

I feel your arms wrapped around me

Each time you hear my plea.

 

Freed from the shackles of blight,

Two spirited souls unite,

I would gladly live forever

If I would stay within you tonight.

 

From far across the seeking miles

I feel warmth within your smiles,

Soaring high in the midnight sky

Together life has no trials.

 

Canine pneuma familiar

You crept right under my skin,

Fitting my breath a handmade glove

Like a string to my violin.

© 2013 TrimarcoRansome


Author's Note

TrimarcoRansome
This poem was heartfelt for a dear friend, I did do a polished version but I prefer this one. So here it is in its raw state, the way this one was meant to stay.
N.b. A familiar is a animal spirit used in European witchcraft.

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If you prefer this version you have every right to stick with it. Your poems are your own children so to speak. A sincere, poetic write. Nicely penned.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I love this poem . . . I have felt this way about many who've crossed the rainbow bridge, both 2-legged & 4-legged. I love V4 & every other verse, too! You do a great job of suggesting the mysteries of how we stay connected to people/spirits who are not near us . . . there are dimensions we do not understand & your hints are done in well-crafted imagery for the senses (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Years Ago


I always prefer the rough, unfinished versions of things.
The stuff I write is rarely edited.
Like this piece, it retains a rawness and intensity that can be lost.

This has elements of classic English poetry in it (Manley Hopkins etc). I love the considered use of language and structure you have adopted

Posted 8 Years Ago


TrimarcoRansome

8 Years Ago

Thank you! I prefer to leave things as they originally write themselves too, this did lose its edge .. read more
There's a meld of metered precision with relaxed, loving, peace here. Have read it twice, second time aloud.. and feel a kind of beckoning to stay a while and listen for more.. Would if I could.

That last stanza has a preciousness that lures.. ... quite lovely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


TrimarcoRansome

8 Years Ago

Thank you! I play the violin and the person it was written for is a dog musher, hence the language I.. read more
emmajoy

8 Years Ago

Ahhh - sweet violin, once learned to perfection. Our sister played too. Whjat a wonderful combinat.. read more
Utterly enchanting. The title snared me in, and what a surprise it was!

Posted 8 Years Ago


TrimarcoRansome

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Kelly! The title came from an old gypsy who I sat and talked to as a child, some words he.. read more
Get under the skin and stay there.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TrimarcoRansome

9 Years Ago

Thanks Andy! :-)
I don't know how it reads 'polished' as you stated but I really enjoyed this....love that last line, it really brought it all home. Have a great New Year Helen.

Posted 10 Years Ago


TrimarcoRansome

10 Years Ago

Thank you Frieda, happy new year to you too!
"There is a wind upon the heath Dear

Upon it I hear you whisper,

I feel you on and around my skin

A mirage my mind to picture."

Splendid




Posted 10 Years Ago


TrimarcoRansome

10 Years Ago

Thanks Sami!
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome...:).......
I like poetry the way it was first written.I prefer it that way because once it is polished like you said the essence is often lost.Good work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


TrimarcoRansome

10 Years Ago

Thank you! Yes, some are just how they are meant to be originally.
Helen
so nice, I liked the lines, 'from far across the seeking miles, I feel warm with your smile' , it has a far reaching effect in all aspect, well done
sayed thangal

Posted 10 Years Ago


TrimarcoRansome

10 Years Ago

Thank you, Sayed

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Added on November 19, 2013
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TrimarcoRansome

Southampton, United Kingdom



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Biography .Helen Trimaro-Ransome grew up in the Wiltshire countryside which hugely inspired her many creative talents and has remained working in creative fields during her adult life. After sitting .. more..

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