Autumnal Winters

Today it rained, poured down, while I tended my garden and animals. It was so refreshing to feel the rain on my skin it inspired me to write about the seasons in relation to life and death.

Thor's mysteries haunt darkened skies,

Lightning raptures in ambrosial highs,

Fronds spore into new life's glory,

Proudly preserving last years story,

Oaks mighty golden umber hues,

Where webs dance across lucent dews.

 

Inseminating planet's riches,

Coursing streams Dryad's stitches,

Resting her seed until flesh anew,

Flora she sleeps beneath earthy pews,

Peaceful swaddled beneath the soil,

Nature hibernates from her summer toil.

 

Winter's chastity bitterly bites,

Shadows cast long cold Autumn nights,

Dead wood flames lit dancing fires,

Winds howl across ghostly mires,

Flakes fall muted upon solid ground,

No movement nor sight or sound

 

The earth she slumbers dreaming deeply

Laying in wait so meekly

Rains patter amongst damp woody glades

Nursing nurturing viridian shades

Underneath the great timber bowers

Spring will sing welcome showers

 

Reviews

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
I sit before my fire, hot coffee as black as my heart in hand. My pipe fills my nose with the essence of peach, yet with all this repose your creative write hurdles my pneuma to a place some where in the creation. I suddenly find myself standing in a forest of ancient oak trees, I hear, feel, and smell the enchanted scene you have painted in my spirit, very well done, very cleverly written.

Blessings, Bill Laughing-Bear

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Bill... With the scene you set, it truly is an honor to immerse you further into a contented place.
Kindest regards, Helen

[Frieda P]

The imagery here is stunning, love 'dead wood flames lit dancing fires'....&

Winter's chastity bitterly bites,
Shadows cast long cold Autumn nights

Your personification of the seasons is unique and superbly pen'd!

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you, Frieda, I like to think readers see as they read. I am really pleased you enjoyed it.
read moreThank you, Frieda, I like to think readers see as they read. I am really pleased you enjoyed it.
Helen

[Frieda P]

I saw and I felt this one's nip too, you're more than welcome, muchly enjoyed Helen.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Lady,

A most powerful rewrite. A poem that already held so many wonderful feelings has been immeasurably improved.

Kudos!

Rick

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you Rick, for everything. It certainly works much better now.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Hi Rick, I'm back for the winter! I wanted to let you know that this write which you encouraged me to spend more time on has recently been recorded for a west end theatre show!
I hope this finds you well!
Helen

[Rick Puetter]

Excellent news, and congratulations! I am doing well. I'm very busy with a new job working for the company that bought my company last December. We're trying to break into a few new markets and sell/license my newer patents, with the cellphone camera market being our primary focus as present. Not writing as much as usual. Don't know why, but I haven't been writing as much poetry and I've written a few new essays, which is a bit of a surprise to me. Anyway, I'm keeping happy and busy. That's as much as can be hoped for by anyone.

Welcome back to WC and have a wonderful and productive winter.

Best regards!

Rick

[TrimarcoRansome]

I'm happy to hear your life is busy, mine is also.
Thank you for your time and encouragement on this one!
Helen

[Rick Puetter]

This one was well deserving of comment, encouragement, and praise. Outstanding rewrite of a poem already powerful in its own rights.

[Tai Ryens]

Using mythology to depict the seasons is surely a wondrous, imaginative way to speak of them. I've seen them portrayed as emotions, colors, time, people, and various other sorts, but this has to be a unique method I haven't seen quite yet. Each summary clearly reveals you have brushed upon your cultural stories, or at least have a brief comprehension of it, and variety is always good with poetry. I enjoyed this, well done.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you for your comments Tai

[TrimarcoRansome]

Praise indeed! thank you very much, Rick.

[Rick Puetter]

You have a mastery of meter and excellent, descriptive vocabulary. I greatly enjoyed the poem.

Wonderful write, full of vision and the feeling of the season. High marks!

Very best regards,

Rick

[Stella Armour]

love the rhyming and the meter, but the imagery is superb Helen, autumn is my favourite time of year..even the rain is beautiful to me as sings and runs into rivulets.. a fascinating season

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The rhyme scheme you use to describe the moment...and Autumn is here and alive...so will pass and come again...I see you were inspired to write this one in your excerpt on top...as the rain was coming down...

[TrimarcoRansome]

The rain fell and so did the Ash leaves as I raked them up, thank you for your review

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...I saw this on the feed lines and took a glance...

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing use of thoughts and description in the poem. Gave life and purpose to the changing of the seasons. I like the four seasons. Here in Michigan similar to Southampton. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[TrimarcoRansome]

Each season brings its own merits, I enjoy watching the changes between them. Tank you for reviewing

[Coyote Poetry]

Me too. You are welcome.

[Tate Morgan]

nature the great arbiter of our fate.In it we see the beauty of all that is.Too bad we live such short lives.We can only appreciate a small amount of it

[TrimarcoRansome]

Our Autumns here are quite incredible, So much happening beneath what we see, thank you for the review :-)

[Tate Morgan]

you are welcome I love autumn but it scares me a bit as it means the coming winter

[poetdoug]

"Rains patter amongst woody glades, nursing nurturing viridian shades."
What lovely expressions of poetry to add to your creative seasonal touch of words.
Simly outstanding

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you for rewiewing

[poetdoug]

you are most welcome. (Simly typo--Simply)