Autumnal Winters

Today it rained, poured down, while I tended my garden and animals. It was so refreshing to feel the rain on my skin it inspired me to write about the seasons in relation to life and death.

Thor's mysteries haunt darkened skies,

Lightning raptures in ambrosial highs,

Fronds spore into new life's glory,

Proudly preserving last years story,

Oaks mighty golden umber hues,

Where webs dance across lucent dews.

 

Inseminating planet's riches,

Coursing streams Dryad's stitches,

Resting her seed until flesh anew,

Flora she sleeps beneath earthy pews,

Peaceful swaddled beneath the soil,

Nature hibernates from her summer toil.

 

Winter's chastity bitterly bites,

Shadows cast long cold Autumn nights,

Dead wood flames lit dancing fires,

Winds howl across ghostly mires,

Flakes fall muted upon solid ground,

No movement nor sight or sound

 

The earth she slumbers dreaming deeply

Laying in wait so meekly

Rains patter amongst damp woody glades

Nursing nurturing viridian shades

Underneath the great timber bowers

Spring will sing welcome showers

 

Reviews

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
I sit before my fire, hot coffee as black as my heart in hand. My pipe fills my nose with the essence of peach, yet with all this repose your creative write hurdles my pneuma to a place some where in the creation. I suddenly find myself standing in a forest of ancient oak trees, I hear, feel, and smell the enchanted scene you have painted in my spirit, very well done, very cleverly written.

Blessings, Bill Laughing-Bear

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Bill... With the scene you set, it truly is an honor to immerse you further into a contented place.
Kindest regards, Helen

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Fantastic writing... each line was significant to the subject matter. You had me at hello with this piece. The first line was the catcher and everything else was the anchor. Very impressive writing. Nature is one of my kryptonite subjects, in terms of my own ability; you have given it great life here, and I applaud it. Great piece!

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you for your praise! This is one of my favourite pieces.

[emmajoy]

' Oaks mighty golden umber hues, ~ Where webs dance across lucent dews.''

It takes a very special and rare skill to create visuals with words.. but here you've succeeded with beauty, comparison, myth.. and so much more. Each stanza is a minor masterpiece that builds space by space til it fills the mind with panorama.... beautiful, gentle yet expansive to a point of - - please aloow me to say... ORBIT!

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you, very much! I have recorded this one to music, it sounds haunting...

[emmajoy]

Don't doubt it does... brilliant! What a gifted woman you are.

[Jacob Clifford]

Very nice sense of scale in this poem. You have good flow and interesting word choices.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you!

[Anand Sehgal]

Lightning raptures in ambrosial highs,

Fronds spore into new life's glory,

Proudly preserving last years story,


super-awesome flow. Loved it .
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[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you for your review!

[fireblossom]

Beyond its theme of seasonal effect on land and life this poem exhibits a great command of language as well as use of mythical themes. Lovely and moody. A very good poem.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you!

[zainul]

Very lovely piece that vividly speaks of natural beauty.
Well done.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you for your time to stop by and review my work

[Pradeep Nair]

It's really wonderful...
"Winter's chastity bitterly bites,
Shadows cast long cold Autumn nights,
Dead wood flames lit dancing fires,
Winds howl across ghostly mires,"---- the most beautiful lines...

Creativity with an extra pair of wings.....

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you for you kind review!

[Great Aunt Astri]

I quite enjoyed reading this. I am interested to know what metre sequence you used? It does read rather nicely so perhaps you wrote it 'with the flow'. I love to read poems about nature and the seasons. They provide an infinite amount of ideas. Your poem brings up some lovely word pictures.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you, I am pleased you enjoyed it.