Today it rained, poured down, while I tended my garden and animals. It was so refreshing to feel the rain on my skin it inspired me to write about the seasons in relation to life and death.
My Dear Writing Friend,
I sit before my fire, hot coffee as black as my heart in hand. My pipe fills my nose with the essence of peach, yet with all this repose your creative write hurdles my pneuma to a place some where in the creation. I suddenly find myself standing in a forest of ancient oak trees, I hear, feel, and smell the enchanted scene you have painted in my spirit, very well done, very cleverly written.
Blessings, Bill Laughing-Bear
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your kind words, Bill... With the scene you set, it truly is an honor to immer.. read moreThank you so much for your kind words, Bill... With the scene you set, it truly is an honor to immerse you further into a contented place.
Kindest regards, Helen
Fantastic writing... each line was significant to the subject matter. You had me at hello with this piece. The first line was the catcher and everything else was the anchor. Very impressive writing. Nature is one of my kryptonite subjects, in terms of my own ability; you have given it great life here, and I applaud it. Great piece!
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Thank you for your praise! This is one of my favourite pieces.
' Oaks mighty golden umber hues, ~ Where webs dance across lucent dews.''
It takes a very special and rare skill to create visuals with words.. but here you've succeeded with beauty, comparison, myth.. and so much more. Each stanza is a minor masterpiece that builds space by space til it fills the mind with panorama.... beautiful, gentle yet expansive to a point of - - please aloow me to say... ORBIT!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you, very much! I have recorded this one to music, it sounds haunting...
8 Years Ago
Don't doubt it does... brilliant! What a gifted woman you are.
Beyond its theme of seasonal effect on land and life this poem exhibits a great command of language as well as use of mythical themes. Lovely and moody. A very good poem.
My Dear Writing Friend,
I sit before my fire, hot coffee as black as my heart in hand. My pipe fills my nose with the essence of peach, yet with all this repose your creative write hurdles my pneuma to a place some where in the creation. I suddenly find myself standing in a forest of ancient oak trees, I hear, feel, and smell the enchanted scene you have painted in my spirit, very well done, very cleverly written.
Blessings, Bill Laughing-Bear
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your kind words, Bill... With the scene you set, it truly is an honor to immer.. read moreThank you so much for your kind words, Bill... With the scene you set, it truly is an honor to immerse you further into a contented place.
Kindest regards, Helen
I quite enjoyed reading this. I am interested to know what metre sequence you used? It does read rather nicely so perhaps you wrote it 'with the flow'. I love to read poems about nature and the seasons. They provide an infinite amount of ideas. Your poem brings up some lovely word pictures.
Biography
.Helen Trimaro-Ransome grew up in the Wiltshire countryside which hugely inspired her many creative talents and has remained working in creative fields during her adult life. After sitting .. more..