Smoke and Ashes

Muse on the beauty and dangers of fire

Frolicking against dark mooned sky
Enchanted dreaming within its trance
Captured flickering maiden dance
Beautiful charade veils the evil facade
Vulcan dances upon ashes in lust
Furnace twisted castings of hell unjust
Beauty in brimstone
When flames thrust

Reviews

[R J Askew]

The primal force of life in play. Well writ.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you!

[Tennessee]

Fire can have much beauty to it and much danger at the same time. To me it seemed you described the fire as dancing in the smoke and ash. You had clever word choice kid. "Beautiful charade veils the evil facade", clever and lovely.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you!

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend From Across The Pond,
You take your reader and place them under that sky as they watch this dance unfold. I had to look up two words, they being “charade” and “Vulcan”. Both are listed below. Well written, I could smell the coals.

Blessings, Your BillBear

charade | sh əˈrād|
noun
an absurd pretense intended to create a pleasant or respectable appearance : talk of unity was nothing more than a charade.
• ( charades) a game in which players guess a word or phrase from pantomimed clues.
ORIGIN late 18th cent.: from French, from modern Provençal charrado ‘conversation,’ from charra ‘chatter,’ perhaps of imitative origin.

Vulcan |ˈvəlkən| Roman Mythology
the god of fire. Greek equivalent Hephaestus .

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend From Across The Pond,
With the secret of this poem now known it would seem to me that if a fair maiden feels the need to dance, might other places be safer? And depending on what she chooses to adore herself in and before whom she dances, a fire much hotter than that of brimstone can consume both the dancer and the privileged spectator.
Just my thoughts based on experience.

Blessings, Your Smiling BillBear

[TrimarcoRansome]

My Dear BillBear! When fair maidens need to dance, health and safety do not come into the equation!!!

[Tate Morgan]

Well lets hope the autumn leaves are not a precursor to the fires of Hades. Though Im sure they have a seat saved for me

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you Tate, I fell in a fire pit some time ago and suffered some burns [not too serious thankfully] this was a reflection on the beauties and wrath of fires

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Is it me Helen......you seem to be very accident prone!?? :)

[TrimarcoRansome]

No it's not you!! I do seem to be accident prone!! and never do things by halves either!! ; )

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Awwwww x :)

[Ink Angel]

Imagery is really vivid, a wild poem I love it!

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you!

[Inspiring Writer]

Good write, beautiful write written by you. I liked your Imaginary. It's a short piece and a nice flow of ink.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you for reading!

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Well done... you gave fire a beautiful identity with this piece.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you, I am glad you liked it

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

It was a pleasure.

[Rocans]

Well done! The way this poem was written fascinated me. The words you use are very effective in explaining yourself. I think this was a good write.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write ...A great poem of fire...:)

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[quinfinn]

there have been countless poems penned about fire. awesome thing is, this one is not trifling and predictable as so many of them are. the wordplay you employ is refreshing and original. the imagery you create is brilliant, and the length of this write is perfect, not overcooked (pun intended) but rounded out in superb fashion. this gets a shelf in my library, dear poet!

[TrimarcoRansome]

Thank you! I recently fell in a fire and suffered a few burns [not badly] but enough to hurt like hell!! Being the original fire starter, the one always messing with the camp fire! This inspired the bitter sweet element of the most furious element of all!! Thank you for your kind words