Here Lies Jenny

It was all just too much.

She was drowned to death
Though her hair remains dry
She was stabbed to death
Though no wounds puncture her skin
She was beaten to death
Though she has no bruises
She was scared to death
For every word she muttered
She met a battalion of warriors
Wasting their breath on stolen ideas
Shoving insults and blows down her throat
Surrounding her in lies
Filling her mind with false concepts
Until the point of no return
Everyone pushed and shoved
Until the air left her lungs
And now, here lies Jenny

Author's Note

All critiques welcome and appreciated!

Reviews

[Mysana]

I am a huge fan of repetition, for this reason I like how you start with She then with Though. The only things is I would find it better if you mentioned the word puncturing her. You mention that she was stabbed to death didn't describe it in the end, that is the only thing I would possibly want to change. Good job Jeccka!

[Jeccka]

The idea is to show helplessness in the face of verbal abuse. The end is trying to show that eventually she couldn't fight back. Thank you! I really appreciate your input and I'm glad you like it

[K. Payne]

Very nice. Your descriptions are vivid but also brash. When I read it the first time I just thought,
"Okay then. So they didn't physically kill her."
I read it a second time and thought,
"Oh I see. words hurt too!"
Then I read it a third time and thought,
"This is great!" I love how you basically caution that verbal bullying/abuse can cause harm. Powerful.

[Jeccka]

Poetry has never been my strong suit so I'm really happy you like it. I also never thought that I could write something that would make someone else think and read it over and over. This means a lot to me, partially because I really admire your writing as well. Thank you soo much! :) Made my day.

[K. Payne]

You're welcome and that's so sweet; thank you!

[C]

This is really good.
I really liked how you showed what verbal abuse does to a person.

[Jeccka]

Thank you! I'm really glad you like it and appreciate you taking the time to tell me as much.

[C]

no problem and I look forward to more of your writing. :)