To the Father

The trees turn green, the rose petals turn red,
And everywhere you can see there is life.
Then it all leaves and goes dark overhead,
Like the living and the dead are in strife.

'Tis all your work, your everlasting game,
For it's you who makes the seasons spin 'round.
Allowing the plants to achieve their aim,
Then taking to away without a sound.

But you are no villain, not not at all,
Without you we'd live in ignorance.
for no one but you can teach us our call,
Without your guidance we'd not have a chance.

You are the river of the water flow,
You are the ray piercing the canopy,
You give is our life and you make us grow,
You give us wisdom to live happily.

When "Father" I hear the altar bells chime,
I think not of god, but you, Father Time.

Reviews

[Extant]

The thoughts in the words are so powerful and well spoken, the sheer feeling of nature is what I love.

[Taji Herbert]

Wow. The end was a good twist most people think of God. I also enjoyed your gradual escalation of emotions. The first stanza had me worried but it built up beautifull into something i did not expect.

[Pumpkinspice]

This very well written and creative. Oh what stories Father Time has to tell. This was a joy to read. Good luck in my contest!
Pumpkin:)

[Just Brooke]

I like the imagery very creative, this is a real work of art. You express yourself very neatly and have a unique style. Don't ever stop writing, you have a talent!

[Jesse Jacques]

very descriptive and no grammar errors. very good

[KAREN]

Like the way you describe the leaves, the rose petals, it's a beautiful and powerful poem!

[Jazique]

Nice father time he is very wise. Amazing job.

[Desert Dreamer]

Time teaches wisdom to the observant ones, there is much to be learned from watching the progression of seasons or seeing the flow of a river.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

I realy like how those last two lines change the overall breath of the poem~ as one who is more inclined to place my belief in father time than the tempermental one in scripture~ i can really appreciate the closing to the wonderful poem~