Sound Asleep

this is a little "iffy"

even when i am half-asleep
my father's image is in my head so deep
after i awaken, i find a strange box
in the drawer wear i keep my socks
in the strange box was a note pad
and the first line of writing had made me so sad
it read, "i am afraid your father has died"
I was so depressed i cried and cried
i skipped too many classes
i keep staring at His old glasses
i stopped talking to friends
and i stopped responding calls that have been sent
But it doesn't matter how much tears are shed
it won't hide the fact that He is dead
because if He saw me today, watching the dawn
He would want me to carry on

Author's Note

this is not about me it's about children who have their father sent off to war only to find they have died fighting for them :(

Reviews

[Bridgette's Ink]

:'( how emotional, very well written.

[Silent Knight]

how sad...

[All Good Things End]

thats amazing
i really got the image of the person and note pad and glasses
WOWZA
WOWS me EVERYTIME
would reciew 1000000000000+ if i could

[Tree Bark]

thank you! i'll try my best :D

[Quentin Moyer]

This is really good! I like the rhyme and I like how you made it from the point of view of someone that has lost their fathers. Keep up the good work!

[Tree Bark]

yeah i know that's why there's a sad face

[paradise]

awwhes danielle its so good and sad :(