You In The Ground Makes Perfect Sense

This is just another love song

that's gone terribly wrong

I've been writing this for days

but it still always ends up the same

I try to make it sound right

but you're the only thing on my mind

so I'll let emotions take control

and this time it's you I'm aiming for

tonight I'll sneak in through the window and I won't make a sound

make sure that everyone is sleeping and just tip toe around

I'll find my way back to your bedroom where you're lying impaired

I'll take you to my house and in my yard I'll bury you there

I'll never have to hear your voice or see your f*****g face

or miss the girl I used to love or the s**t that you became

I try so hard not to think of you

but your face is in everything I do

I use this pen to try to let you go

but your name is written in every syllable

don't think this means I'm still in love

I wish I could say I agreed with the above

but these months have shown me you're a fake

and this time it's you who's life's at stake

tonight I'll sneak in through the window and I won't make a sound

make sure that everyone is sleeping and just tip toe around

I'll find my way back to your bedroom where you're lying impaired

I'll take you to my house and in my yard I'll bury you there

I'll never have to hear your voice or see your f*****g face

or miss the girl I used to love or the s**t that you became

there's only one way for the pain to end

not having you back but having you dead

there's just something about that smile

that makes me want to kill you and not reconcile

there's only one way for the pain to end

not having you back but having you dead

there's just something about that smile

that makes me want to kill you and not reconcile

you're a lying b***h

I'll never get over it

start saving your strength now

you'll need it to try to dig your way out

tonight I'll sneak in through the window and I won't make a sound

make sure that everyone is sleeping and just tip toe around

I'll find my way back to your bedroom where you're lying impaired

I'll take you to my house and in my yard I'll bury you there

I'll never have to hear your voice or see your f*****g face

or miss the girl I used to love or the s**t that you became

tonight I won't say goodbye

let the worms do the talking as they're eating you inside.

Reviews

[DiskartetHaraya]

I find the ambiguity of sneaking in at night and the ground effective in highlighting that those Other things done at night are not what's going on in the poem.

With regards to the length, it didn't feel too long at all. That the girl is impaired but the persona still wants her in the ground just shows the hate, and that keeps the reader interested.

I find repetitions, especially of this kind, manic and obsessive. I have mixed feelings regarding that. As your bio says, you write lyrics, so maybe it's different if in song. But as a reader seeing this as poem, I am convinced of the hate but not of the mania. The persona seems too sane for the repetition.

Still, interesting non-love piece.