Complicating Jealousy

I wrote this when jealousy struck me as a way to let it out.

Jealousy is a b***h, 

Like a storm inside your head, 

Dark clouds hover over, 

Never seeming to end.

It hardens your heart, 

And eats away at your soul, 

It walks down a path, 

Of pure hatred and destruction. 

It's like a burning fire, 

Spreading from end to end, 

Nothing can put it out, 

Until you're left with blackness and a hole.

So don't let the shame take you, 

For there is light on the other side, 

It will eventually come to a halt, 

And keep passing until the end of time.

Author's Note

Please, comments and critique are welcome.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree.
"It's like a burning fire,
Spreading from end to end,
Nothing can put it out,
Until you're left with blackness and a hole."
Your words strong and true. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Mary Ochoa]

I found myself relating to this write. Great job:) Thanks for sharing!

[Haley Wilson]

Love the poem, dear! And it's fully relatable. Jealousy is a wicked thing for sure.

[Emily]

What a strong first line!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[Baby Ricochet]

A little bit of jealousy's a lot of fun. Too much though, disaster

[~]

Yes, jealousy when out of control is something we should be afraid of, but some jealousy is good. it makes the relationship healthy.
you did a good job spilling your guts on paper. I like the flow of it, and the tone is most apt.

[C. Rose]

"It walks down a path" sticks out because all the other lines are dramatic burning hateful, but walks down a path is neutral.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I love the idea of this writ! Nicely done, Travie.

[JOPHIEL]

I like the idea of jealousy not being a phase, but a cycle that can occur not only from love. G8 m8 8/8