Time

This is a poem I wrote on a rainy night.

What is time exactly? 

It goes on and on forever, 

With every tick tock of the clock, 

Slowly breathing my life away. 

One second goes by, 

I let my guard down, 

To find that the sun is sinking, 

And the stars light up the night. 

Am I getting wiser, 

With each day passing, 

Forgetting who I am, 

Stopping to think of yesterday. 

There will be no end, 

A life lived tragically, 

Bittersweet memories stay, 

As I slowly waste away. 

Author's Note

Please, comments and critique are welcome.

Reviews

[New Theory]

A really good write about time. Pondering about what it is. Nicely done.

[Nyu]

Hah, this reminded me of that viral video "don't hug me I'm scared." x) This phenomena is so much a mystery to me it interests me to such a point where I could get headaches from overthinking it. I thought your perspective and sense of time was enjoyable to read. I like the tension (between past present and future) provoking way you chose to end the piece it was a nice way to end. I think I learned from this poem, and really good job.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

A very cleaver and true poem about time.
Time stops for nobody, and its true every, minute, hour, week and year, goes by so fast, and you cant get them back.
Sometimes we waste our life away, I admit, I have been wasting mine for a long time.
We need to take control of our lives, live life to the fullest. Because we only get one life, and time isn't going to stand still. The future comes whether we are ready for it or not. Life is to short.
Wish I could take my own advice haha!
Great write. Brillaint :)

[Funke Kolapo]

Though dark, yet beautiful, true and thought provoking.

[Kamari's]

Very true and sad well done

[Brook]

This poem made me think of impatience. I am very very impatient haha! But a lovely lovely write Travis :)

[Avinash]

This is a brilliant dark poem my friend but I will suggest you to write explicitly about your thoughts exclusively for yourself. I am sure that would help you understand your situation and mind in much better way.

[wordman]

and as you get older this is more common

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Wow, I love the idea of it, nicely written.

Kaze~

[Bluefire]

It reminds me of a song, "what day is it? And in what month? This clock never seemed so alive."
I think it was by Lifehouse.
This looks like a dark, rainy night poem. Kind of sad and dark.
Well played. ^^