Smoke in Your Eyes

I love you
But I don't know what to do
Of all the people in the world
Why did my soul choose you

Tri-eyes widen
Screaming with empathy
Awaken all senses;
To swim through the longest sea
Or climb the tallest tree
All my energy would never cease
Until I found another of thee

Reviews

[Androglossia]

This is very emotional. It's really crazy what love can do. It can torture us to brink of insanity. It completes us in a way we can never understand. . Even great poets, playwrights, and legends can only briefly touch the true meaning of love.

This is a great piece and very expressive one. Thank you for sharing.

[Kait]

Thank you. The craziest part about love is that I never knew it, but have felt it for someone I can never have. It hurts just the same.

Thank you for your review :)

[Patricia B. Hepler]

'..Why did my soul choose you'. I could see the energy. Great poem...pat

[Kait]

Thank you so much!

[Chris]

Quite the real quandary... Love isn't chosen nor always socially moral.

[Kait]

Very true.

Thank you for your review!

[Chris]

The thought, content, and flow of the first stanza are very clear. The second stanza describes well the difference tween mere wanting and love.

[Sami Khalil]

This poems awakens the senses , too.

[Kait]

I try and incorporate the senses, Synesthesia is what drives my work.

Thank you for the review!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Foxemerald]

I like it, especially the use of the word 'try,' which, in spite of being ambiguous, has several implications because of that quality . . . I am wrought to hold the loveliest picture, one of green grass and green trees, and I can smell greenery. I can see kites flying . . . oh, I know all of this is not written down, but you do provide all of these 'senses.' I enjoyed reading it!

[Kait]

I was meaning to say "tri-eyes" as a reference to the 3rd eye opening...can u feel it ;)