Message in a Bottle

It's the calmest of things,

the strongest of things.

It's the farthest, the deepest

and longest of things.

I stare for hours at the sea's

unchanging tides. 

Yet! Contained in each ripple,

magnificent differences lie.

How can something so soothing,

frighten me so?

How can something so terrifying

release all my sorrow and woe?

Creating fear and forgiveness,

with each tide: high and low.

The scent unlocks memories

and I taste salt with each breathe.

The sound gives me strength 

and I feel its mist on my chest.

The sight leaves me speechless,

devouring body, soul, and the rest.

It consumes me

through every sense I possess.

I am unaccompanied by all,

I am all that I own.

I am deserted... abandoned...

on this island far from home.

Perched on the sand,

toes emerged in white foam.

I am left to decay

with no where to roam.

I write this now, so at least,

I know I exist to myself.

I exist as a dusted

and forgotten toy on its shelf.

I feel like a w***e, 

caged in her beloved brothel-

an infant suffocated,

by my own mother's swaddle-

the devoted follower,

unrecognized as the last apostle-

This is the last of my life,

this- My Message in a Bottle.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

know I exist to myself.

"I exist as a dusted

and forgotten toy on its shelf.

I feel like a w***e,

caged in her beloved brothel-

an infant suffocated,

by my own mother's swaddle-

the devoted follower,

unrecognized as the last apostle-

This is the last of my life,

this- My Message in a Bottle."

Such powerful realizations and feelings...A splendid poem...:)

[Dr. Wood ?]

Living by the sea myself I can associate with this entirely...Loved it

[annabellee]

wow this is really fabolous, I just loved it.
Good rhythm and rhymes.
Very deep and emotional poem.
Loved the ending.
well done :)

[Latifa]

the repitition in the begining is really good

[zainul]

I understand your purpose.
Any person tries to survive even grasping a straw.
Very nice write.
Thanks for sharing.

[Saltayslick]

This poem touched me to my bone marrow,i‘m beginning to think if this,didnt happen to you

[00000000000000000000000..]

That was deep! I loved it understand the consume part all to well ,Don't have tides to see with waves to embrace my soul but I see it in mountains of still, Flowers trees animals stuff like that. So yeah I get it. Btw love that title :) That's one of my favorite movies!

[Cameron]

Hello. Very nice poem. I would only suggest changing "contained" in stanza 1 to "within" or something else for coherence sake. Reverse the two lines to see how it reads: Magnificent differences lie contained in each ripple. Were it to instead read "within each ripple magnificent differences lie", it might flow a little better. Or maybe that's not what you were going for. I don't know. Your poem, which is already better than any poem I could ever write, your rules.

One other note/question. the last stanza takes a very sharp turn from the rest of the reflective, contemplative, peaceful nature of the rest of the poem. Consider leaving your reasons for writing the poem out of the poem itself. in my VERY humble opinion, I liked what you had to say in the poem itself, and it left itself open to the reader's own interpretation about what you meant when you wrote it, allowing the reader to draw comparisons to their own contemplative experiences. By bringing your own personal reflections on your own personal experiences I am sure it becomes an excellent tool for personal catharsis, but perhaps it loses some value to a reader other than yourself.

[Trash Fairy]

This poem is supposed to be a person's last attempt at communicating with the outside world while they are stranded on a deserted island. I pictured a person sitting on its beach with nothing else to do before he/she perishes than write this message and release it into the world via a bottle on the sea. The bitterness comes from being forgotten and alone on 'this island far from home.' Hope that made sense! Thanks for reading and thank you for commenting! =]

[Cameron]

Definitely makes more sense in that light. Sorry, I hope I didn't offend you, and that my overall enjoyment of the piece was not obscured by my few constructively-intended comments. I rather liked it, FWIW :)

[Trash Fairy]

not at a bother at all! Thanks for the feedback =]