Warm

I’m currently making a large group of love poems that I will post here and eventually give to my love.

I have a heart,
Beating for you,
Warming me,
Leaving me wishing,
I can hold you in my arms,
And warm you too.

I have a hand,
Held in a mitten,
Wishing,
Hoping,
That it can be freed,
Into the frigid air,
Cold for a second,
Before you take it,
With your hand,
Also,
Freed from a mitten,
Keeping us both warm.

I have arms,
Spread open,
Hoping that,
One day,
They will be filled,
With the warmth,
From you.

I have a brain,
That is filled,
With warm thoughts,
Of you,
Sitting on a frozen bench,
Smiling at me,
Doubling over in laughter,
Crying cold tears,
Tears of liquid diamond,
Flowing hard and fast,
That ceased when I walked into the room,
When those cold liquid diamonds transformed,
Into a warm,
Bright,
Smile.

I have every right,
Every reason,
To love you,
But my only question,
The question that brings doubt and fear to my mind,
What if you don’t love me back?

Author's Note

Is this an okay poem?

Reviews

[A.G.]

Warm is the feeling I got from this write. Lovely poem. You are human and I like how you say you have a brain, you have hands, you have a heart and a love for that person...human features...what if, what if is always the question y know. The question is answered eventually, you just got to pay close attention and open up. If they appreciate you for you then that's enough. Lovely 😊 thank you for sharing your thoughts and heart with us once more. 💛 Stay golden.
-Angelina 🖤

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I have every right,
Every reason,
To love you,
But my only question,
The question that brings doubt and fear to my mind,
What if you don’t love me back?

esp loved these lines, good luck

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

hi i just read your poem for my current competition, judging today i still love it good luck!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

wow wow wow thanks so much for your entry into my love competition, love it, goodluck,

[angel]

It's a VERY OK poem.
One difficulty I do see is that you have put a comma at the end of every line, and most of them should not be there.A poem should be punctuated just like prose. Look at this verse, with the correct punctuation, and see if you get what I mean:

I have a hand,
Held in a mitten;
Wishing,
Hoping,
That it can be free
Into the frigid air;
Cold for a second,
Before you take it
With your hand,
Also
Freed from a mitten,
Keeping us both warm.

I remember having the same difficulty when I first began writing poems. You have to capitalize every first word in a line, and in prose, that means you need punctuation--before nearly every capital letter. In poetry, it doesn't.

[Melissa Murray]

oh my goodness, I feel exactly this way about someone else as well. You write so simply and the immediacy of the feeling is palpable. Keep writing,and find someone you like who appreciates you and your poemy-ness, it's not so complicated. I also love the Halloween poem very much. In it you capture that inside/outside, the hiding and revealing part of Halloween that is so magical and spooky-good.

[Trapped]

Thanks!
It's hard to find someone who I like in the first place. Im a bit picky...
- Trapped