It Was Me

Inspired by a rough patch in my life.

 

I could only see red behind my eyes.

Fire built in my throat.

The room spun.

It wasn't me.

 

Anger burned in my stomache.

All voices seemed so far away.

It felt like I was underwater.

It wasn't me.

 

Being pulled away,

I realized the cruel truth.

What I had done.

It was me.

 

It was me.

Knowing so, sent a haunting chill

Through my body.

I had done such a thing.

 

Locking myself in my closet.

Was all I could do.

The voices were much louder.

Screaming in my ears.

 

I felt as though I had almost drowned.

As though, I had finally got to the surface,

But the water was set to flames.

And I was without help.

 

The truth carved itself into my heart.

I could see it all flash before my eyes again.

The room started to spin again.

I felt like I was burning.

 

It was me.

Author's Note

Please ignore grammer problems.

Reviews

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

Really good, I'd advise not asking people to ignore grammer problems though as it's the only way you'll improve. I liked how you underlined "was" it got the point across and the realisation as well.

[shane]

very cool, good work =]

[MoonlitAngel]

Very descriptive. Slow paced, which is always a good thing :) I loved it. Keep writing!

[Sseoni]

Wow! What an amazing poem! I really liked it! A lot of people can relate to this poem! It's so emotional and was very well written! :D

[ebur™]

great poem, great expression, great everything.... i loved how you emphasized the 'was', and also, i think many people can relate to this that makes it all the more better. i loved this alot! great job. :)

[Emily?]

I absolutely love this poem. I can so relate! It has so much feeling and emotion in it, i just am in love with your poem! Great Write=)

[..R.I.P..]

This was awesome, very emotional and deep. Great job.

[Allison]

This was like, really awesome.:)

[Jane Doe]

awww its pretttyful i like it

[CircusNerd]

this is so deep O_O :) keep up the amazing work!!!