Spring Rainbows

I wrote this for my little sister. She likes rainbows. O_o

The joy of Spring.

Watching the clouds float past.

The sun playing a childish game.

Of hide - and - go - seek.

 

When leaves fall.

The birds push them to the sky.

The leaves kiss the sun.

In the motion of Spring.

 

A soft rain bends the flowers.

Even the mighty rose.

The rain fades with soft music.

The clouds roll away.

Like children down a hill.

 

The sun shines brighter.

After the clouds fade.

A bright ring of color.

Marks the blue sky.

 

The ring nearly fades.

At the coming of another.

Strong storm that rolls.

Over each ray of color.

Author's Note

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Reviews

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This is absolutely awesome! I love the way you described the beauty of nature. I was intrigued by each and every one of your words. I especially loved the beginning lines. How you described the sun (playing childish games...hide and go seek). It was as if I was in the scene of this piece. The visual imagery was so thick that the reader was sitting in the same place with you as you wrote this poem. Excellent read! Keep exercising your gift. I look forward to reading more of your work. I am sure your little sister will cherish this piece for many years to come.

[Mioki]

I really liked this poem! The spring rainbows are actually something I enjoy seeing, but we don't get many around where I live, because it's so dry. Anyways, your writing honestly had that poetical charm that makes up poem. The similes and personification you used in this piece were creative, and made the poem have uniqueness about it.

"A bright ring of color.
Marks the blue sky."

These lines are my favorite, because I can just see the 'bright ring of color', in the sky, and it takes my breath away. Great job on this piece, I cannot wait to read more of your work. There's really a flare about this poem.

[gravitylava]

Its really pretty and very sweet of you to write it for your sister. Its not a heavy poem full of emotion and pain which is nice sometimes. It's just happy. I really loved it!