This is absolutely awesome! I love the way you described the beauty of nature. I was intrigued by each and every one of your words. I especially loved the beginning lines. How you described the sun (playing childish games...hide and go seek). It was as if I was in the scene of this piece. The visual imagery was so thick that the reader was sitting in the same place with you as you wrote this poem. Excellent read! Keep exercising your gift. I look forward to reading more of your work. I am sure your little sister will cherish this piece for many years to come.
wow, i love this. the descriptions were filled with vivid, sensory language and the imagery was tantalizing! the description of the rainbow was flawless in showing its sight appeal and i loved these lines
A soft rain bends the flowers.
Even the mighty rose.
The rain fades with soft music.
The clouds roll away.
Like children down a hill.
how true, it's like i'm sitting beside you watching this! wow again, i'm sure your little sister will love this! keep writing and getting better!!!
:P I really love the imagery in this. I love poems like this.
Sometimes people get so deep sometimes, and it's good to read a poem that gets straight to the point, at the same time being intricate.
"Like, hey! I love rainbows, they're pretty. 'Nuff said!"
And, hey! I love this poem (and rainbows), it's pretty! Nuff said!
Wow! What a wonderful poem! It was beautifully written, wonderfully detailed, and greatly descriptive! Great use and variety of words! Amazing poem! :D
Some people are born with Tragedy in their blood. Could you believe that I was one of those people?
As they say 'Handsome men can't be hurt by water.'
Name: Haru Kingston
Age: Fifteen
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