One Day.

I'm intoxicated by your essence
Like some sweet red wine
As my lungs try to take in air I breathe your fragrance in
Addicted to your loving ways a fire burning from within

My heart is like a butterfly fluttering before it dies
Touch me with your velvet touch and all I can do is sigh
The nightengale sings our song the breeze speaks your name
All the flowers hang their heads it seems that your to blame

Yours is the voice i want to hear when night steals the day
The only one i want with me when stars come out to play
I beg the moon to watch over you while you're far away
And send a little message that together we'll be one day.

Reviews

[Lanky]

I really really like this, its an adorable piece! Its quite a refreshing change from all the more depressing pieces i've reviewed today. I love they rhyme scheme and the way everything flows. I feel touches of emotion in the writing that compare to my own life. I believe that what poets want more than anything is to have their writing connect with another individual and this piece definitely does that.

[Felicity Winter]

Awwww I love this, what a wonderful poem you wrote ^^

[Liza]

beautiful expression of longing, of holding onto a memory of yesterday to make you feel good today and provide you with hope tomorrow..i liked the comparisons between animal life, elements of the earth and plant life.

[Kayla_May]

that was really good

I love the wording you use here. It is outstanding and moving.

[Fallen Angel]

Really great piece of writing. so descriptive and deep and touching.. 10/10

[Undying Glory]

wow this is simply brilliant. a stroke of genius

[Jessie]

Great write! I love the way you put it all together, it flows with ease and you described every detail so perfectly. Thanks so much for sharing and take care..

[Nick Reynolds]

I really enjoy reading other people's songs, as a lyricist i understand the feelings and emotions put into pieces, just as poets put into poetry, authors in their books, artist in their masterpieces, etc. I respect this and I hope to see you make it big someday. :) with lyrics like this, you are bound to become something important.

[Katie]

This piece oozes with emotion and love. I loved the first few lines especially because they made me want to keep reading.