Table

Hammer.

Nails.

Wood.

BANG!

BANG!

BANG!

Table.

 

6/3/14

Reviews

[Tree]

The chain of events poem, perfectly, created. Even in its simplicity this poem packs a wallop. Another thing I'd like to point out, especially, to the causal observer of your work is just how much attention to detail went into this little poem: The order of the tools, the periods at the end of each single word stanza (to open- up some valuable separation) and lastly , the exclamations and the end of each bang, the words, emboldened. And there is more nuance, too. Anyone else reviewing this should take the challenge of picking apart this tiny, tight, well written poem.

Crafty piece.

[Rick r]

Crafty piece. :) I like that. Thank you, Diego, for your attention to the detail. I texted this to my sister when I wrote it. She teaches HS literature. Reply back from her shortly after sending was that her lesson plan for the day had just changed. She loved it. I set out to write something that might just get a smile out of someone (I smile when I read it now). I'm glad you liked it. Thanks again for your reads and comments.
rick

[Tree]

That's a great story, Rick. It's easy to fall in love with our words, the hard part is excising them to make our language not just economical, but more clear, and concise. Something I continue to work on in my own writing. There is a writer here on the wc I think you might appreciate, Ed Hart. He's on my friends list. Look him up.

[Rick r]

Will do. thanks.

[h d e rushin]

Let us call poetic atonality all poems that do not conform to the system of poetic hierarchies
that dominate this site. But I see beginning, exposition, recapitulation and ending. Yes, just Seven words
can do all of this.

and it is done very well. good work
dana

[Rick r]

Thank you, dana.
rick