First Comes Desolation

Just something in the dark realm of my thoughts.

No matter how hard you try to smother paint 

Over the somber shadows on your lilac wall,

The cheerless shade will always seep through

Like black smudged fingerprints,

And the blood stains in your eyes

It's wounds sting every part of my existence

Reviews

[emipoemi]

......Holy kwap! Indeed you did go to a dark realm, and conjured a short but profoundly powerful piece! WOW! The only things I need to say about this is: put a dash after "eyes", change "It's" (in the last line) to "its" (as that's the correct one in this case), and give the last line its own stanza. It would look and flow so much better. But d@mn is this good! The second line is divine, Lines 4 and 5 are brilliant! This is a genuine gem! A marvel! Poetry in motion! Well freaking done!

(I hope you're ok now....did this venting help?)