Rise

I wrote this poem to express my feelings toward us, as a people, rising to become greater than we are...

can we rise?

we've settled for less in these difficult times

disater and death are all around us

it's easy to say "I Give Up"

it's easy to let ourselves fail

 

life is like gravity

always pulling us down

 

so what can you do?

no that's not the question....

is it?

what will we do?

 

we must come up

from this hole we have gouged ourselves in

stand up

on our own two legs

 

lets not hold each other down

when someone is trying to fly

help them up graciously

so we can all remarkably rise 

Reviews

[That_Girl]

A fantasy I think... the idea is wonderful but in truth, it will probably never happen. Can we ever truly come together? Put aside our differences and coexist peacefully? No, I don't think so. Maybe that's just the pessimist inside of me though.... hmmm

Nice piece. :)

[Christopher Booyakasha]

No. I totally agree with you. but i do believe its something we all wish could. happen.

read moreNo. I totally agree with you. but i do believe its something we all wish could. happen.

but you are right. we are too deep in our own s**t to fix this!

[Gilad Levanon]

Haha it's only our belief that we're too deep in the s**t that could prevent us from getting out of it. If we believe it, we can do it.

[Stammers]

Made me think of Angelou's Still I Rise. Dignified.

I think your voice and the balance of your lines is well done - very clear and expressive. If, when revising, you could work some more imagery into your words (or indeed, behind them) I think you would have a very solid piece of work. Nicely done

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Well, we dug our own hole. Everyone keeps crying about how there are no jobs but keeps running to Wal-Mart to buy cheap made in China merchandise. It's stupid. Buy American and there will be American jobs. Buy Chinese and there will be Chinese jobs. The consumers are the ones digging their own graves. But it's like Jack Nicholson said, THEY "can't handle the truth."