Rise

I wrote this poem to express my feelings toward us, as a people, rising to become greater than we are...

can we rise?

we've settled for less in these difficult times

disater and death are all around us

it's easy to say "I Give Up"

it's easy to let ourselves fail

 

life is like gravity

always pulling us down

 

so what can you do?

no that's not the question....

is it?

what will we do?

 

we must come up

from this hole we have gouged ourselves in

stand up

on our own two legs

 

lets not hold each other down

when someone is trying to fly

help them up graciously

so we can all remarkably rise 

Reviews

[That_Girl]

A fantasy I think... the idea is wonderful but in truth, it will probably never happen. Can we ever truly come together? Put aside our differences and coexist peacefully? No, I don't think so. Maybe that's just the pessimist inside of me though.... hmmm

Nice piece. :)

[Christopher Booyakasha]

No. I totally agree with you. but i do believe its something we all wish could. happen.

read moreNo. I totally agree with you. but i do believe its something we all wish could. happen.

but you are right. we are too deep in our own s**t to fix this!

[Gilad Levanon]

Haha it's only our belief that we're too deep in the s**t that could prevent us from getting out of it. If we believe it, we can do it.

[Rita L. Sev]

Amen to not holding each other down, and helping graciously! Nicely penned.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Thankssss! :-)

[Danny Sanchez]

I enjoyed this very much if only it were a reality. Nice work!

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Thank!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh my gosh, Chris! I love this poem! I totally agree with you that instead of everyone bringing everyone down we should help each other when we're down and weak. We do, in fact, live in a cruel and messed up world that it's normal for people to be so rude and negative. See, I can really relate to this poem. I am quite sure a lot of other people can too. If they say they can't, they're most likely lying. :P You know my story about those two girls. People always say to ignore them. It's actually a lot more to it than that. These two girls are not only on this website, they attend the same exact school as I do. Back to your poem, you're right that it's easy to say "I give up" and to let ourselves fall. Some people don't have others to help them back up. That's why I don't take for granted the people in my life that is there for me through thick and thin. There should be a lot more views and reviews on this poem! It's an amazing, truthful, and down-to-earth poem! Great job, Chris. :)

Side note: I love this!

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[Christopher Booyakasha]

Thanks!! Soooo much!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're welcome :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

I like this it speaks of hope and solidarity. On our own we fall but together we can rise. Nice.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Thanks

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome

[Sarah LaMascus]

I agree it is unlikely this could ever happen, but it is something I've always hoped and wished for. Peace, love, respect, and unity. I do hope you might keep writing this piece? The way it ends it's seems unfinished, but that's just my opinion. There's nothing more frustrating than desiring things we know we can't change because it's all in God's hands and in the will of those around us.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Yeah you're right. Hmmm unfinished? Maybe it is..

[Sarah LaMascus]

It could become a great spoken truth kind of poem if you spent a little time on it. :) to me my work is never finished. The minute you're satisfied with your writing is the minute you stop improving. And I want to become great! Maybe have some power with word so I can make changes in this world! And you seem like the kind of man that wants the same

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Wow. You are thinking about it in a much deeper way than I have. Maybe I should continue it. You never know. You or me might be the very ones to change this world.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Cause the world is lost now but it's not too late. It will be difficult but not impossible.

[Sarah LaMascus]

All it takes is extra thought. Perseverance. And the most important thing is passion. I've never lacked in passion. Haha I become impatient with myself a lot of times though, and it slows me down.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

True. I have to say I have lacked in motivation and perseverance. Lately I've done better, but my passion for expressing myself hrough writing has help.
Lol yeah I get impatient too.

[Sarah LaMascus]

Well you should return the favor and read up on me :) it would be nice of you... If not its cool.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Yeah. No problem. It's not a problem at all. Any one in particular??

[Sarah LaMascus]

Mmmm well I only have three up right now... I've got a lot more to put on here, but none of them are very long... The longest one is Untitled, Rightfully So

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Ok I look at all you them! Hahaha. You get what you want a lot don't you??

[Sarah LaMascus]

Why does everybody say that to me... But yes, I do.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Lol. Cause You are aggresive and staight forward. So I can tell. It's okay though. I like that about you. I knew it!

[Sarah LaMascus]

Haha well being blunt and honest definitely is a gift because I disregard people's feelings a lot especially when it comes to reviews. I'm focused on helping you better yourself. As young as I am I know how to be unbiased.

[Sarah LaMascus]

If you have to think about it that means I've done my job. :)

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Hmmm. I can respect that. As young as you are?? How young are you??

[Christopher Booyakasha]

I guess you have...

[Sarah LaMascus]

21

[Christopher Booyakasha]

You are not young....You're old. hahaha

[Sarah LaMascus]

And for that I drink to it.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Hahaha! I'm kidding with you. I'm 20 So I guess I'm young too!

[Sarah LaMascus]

That you are. But I can sit at home in the morning drinking merlot on my day off and you can't. Without being a criminal anyway... :) and I just turned 21 Monday so... Celebrating has commenced!

[Christopher Booyakasha]

I might be a criminal then.... :-/... hahaha!
Well Happy belated Birthday!
I'm not that young, plus your almost a year older than I am. I turn 21 this year.

[Lucy]

Ooooh, some flirting going on ;-)

[Sarah LaMascus]

Cheya...

[Christopher Booyakasha]

sigh... people ruin good moments

[Junique]

to say the truth, i'm in awe, i'm speechless. I just can't put in words to say how powerful and meaningful this poem is, so persuasive it can change someone's agenda. This is certainly excellent! Good job!

[Christopher Booyakasha]

wow... thanks. that was very nice.

[Sami Khalil]

A very nice write...:)

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Thanks!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[K.]

beautiful, a wonderful wish.
"life is like gravity/always pulling us down" thats the best part
I hope we can rise as you say.

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Maybe one day we will...

[Holly]

One word: LOL

[Christopher Booyakasha]

hahahaha!

[Holly]

Dat all ya can say man? Hahaha

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Well all you said was "lol"

[Holly]

I know hehehejehejejejejeej

[Christopher Booyakasha]

hahah your so silly.

[Holly]

Why thank you! Silly is my middle name. Hahah

[Christopher Booyakasha]

lol. is that right?

[Holly]

Yip. ;-)

[s y e]

Lovely dream but like everyone else said, it's just a dream. Beautifully written.




LOLLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL

[Christopher Booyakasha]

You were serious about the war!

[s y e]

Oh yeah! Duh!

[Christopher Booyakasha]

Alright fine!

[s y e]

Yeah! Its ON!