"Love To Be Forgotten"

My Best Poem Yet.((:

Love To Be Forgotten.

We Have Lies That Lie Beneath Us.

Sins That Take Over Our Poor, Fragile Hearts.

But Yet We Have Eachother, Which Is Lost In Our Burned Memories.

Love To Be Forgotten.

 

The Way You Lie About What We Had.

The Truth Is Deep Beneath Your Skin, Trying To Find A Way Out.

Your Face Shows So Many Emotions.

You Just Dont Know What To Do Without Me.

Love To Be Forgotten.

 

I Can See In Your Eyes You Wanna Cry Now That Im Gone.

Darlin' It's Too Late Now.

Im 200,000 Miles Away, Im Not Going Back To That Dreadful Place You Call Home.

Love To Be Forgotten.

Reviews

[Tootsie]

awwwhhh;; goodddddd ( : !!

[Karlie Kadabra.]

I really like the third stanza. One thing that I think would help is, where it says, "I Can See In Your Eyes You Wanna Cry Now That Im Gone." You could put "You wanna cry now that I'm gone." On the next line. Also, adding apostrophes to 'Im' would be good. All in all it's a good poem with a great point.

- KM