When Love Was Love

Never forget how it once felt ~ (Alternative Version)

 

Remember when love was a dance in new light

with a careless sway on an endless night   

 

and glances of heaven could be seen in two eyes

filled with the innocence of  April skies

 

Remember that kiss, the making of days

the reasons for youth set clear in the haze

 

A waltz of two strangers learning to merge

on waves of confusion, this awkward converge

 

Remember the roar of spirits released

the knowledge misled as feelings increased

 

yet birthing dreams like never before

‘forever’ upon fingertips at the close of a door  

 

Remember the plans, how they wrote themselves

like holidays’ overtime of  fairies and elves

 

and the gardens of bliss on a summer’s eve

virgin hearts perched high atop sleeves

 

Remember then, now, this undying light

these chaotic days when sleepless at night

 

believing in love never losing its touch  

or…

   Remembering when we imagined such  

   

 

Reviews

[Yours Truly]

What creative thoughts you expressed with beautiful imagery and metaphors. I like the placement of your words in this piece as well. It captures your attention from the first stanza to the last.

believing in love never losing its touch
or…
Remembering when we imagined such

The way you ended it was really a great touch to the whole write and completed it perfectly. Thank you for the kind review and thank you for sharing. :)
-Yours Truly

[Antoñyo]

Ah, and thanks for the kind and generous review.

[barleygirl]

Beautifully-stated tapestry of lives ensconced in love, complete with the ups & downs of life, but still conveying a graceful acceptance of all the conflicting memories, everything seen thru the eyes of love. Nice use of rhyme & analogy, stated with clarity thru-out.

[Antoñyo]

Your generous review is appreciated greatly, Thank you.

[aLittlePain]

A beautiful journey of love that's entirely captivating! Oh to remember....

[Antoñyo]

Ah, thanks for the kind words and your time.

[Shabeeh Haider]

A wonderful love poem. Very well rhymed. You have taken the reader on a journey of love and bliss.

[Antoñyo]

Thanks for stopping by to read and review

[MOON]

It's the remembrance of that feeling that gets us through the tough times sometimes... Lovely lyrical write

[Antoñyo]

Exactly... Lose the pain, keep the feeling close to heart — if for no other reason than to have something to look forward to.
Thank you for your time and review

[AYVID N]

I wish I had those dreams again. The sky was a bluest blue, the grass a greener green and the sunlight more golden. And we had a spark in our eyes and never ending faith. You took me back to distantly glimpse all of that magic again. This poem is priceless Antonyo.

[Antoñyo]

Yes, how it all enhances... but with so much time ahead of you still, I pray for you what you obviously deserve.

Thanks for the time and kindness, Divya

[AYVID N]

Wow...I have no words to say thanks for your beautiful prayer. You are are welcome Antonyo.

[I Am Svetlana]

Even after a year and four months, there are moments where my relationship still feels new or that I'm learning to gall in love all over again. It's such a brilliant feeling and definitely worth reflecting on!

[Antoñyo]

That's so beautiful, to fall in love all over again. It's a foundation that can hold things together in rougher times..The basis for this poem.
Thanks so much for your expression and feel.

[Jackie]

The rhyming was definitely on point. And the way each line had went together was so perfect. It definitely made sense. Such beautiful words and visuals as well. I really enjoyed it.

[Antoñyo]

Thanks for taking the time to read and for the positive review

[Nisreen]

I love how you use this word "remember"
Like people often dive into life and forget to feel this emotion
with that it is
and could be

so beautiful

[Antoñyo]

Glad you think so. Thanks for stopping by