My father

My eye tears up,

I start to cry, As my father whispers,

his final goodbye.

My mom is holding me back, stroking my head,

as my father lays, on his deathbed.

I'm bawling by now, and everyone knows,

My love for my dad, clearly shows.

Illness is bad.

Death is worse.

It will happen to all of us.

It's a never ending curse.

My dad closes his eyes, and falls into heaven,

before I can count, up to eleven.

He is gone now, And I miss him so.

Why, oh why, did he have to go?

I woke up and found out it was just a dream,

while tears rolled down my skin.

I ran down to my dad and gave him a big hug and said that I loved him ...

Reviews

[TKJules]

Hello again, your words are poignant and i wish my daughter would say to me what you have said too your father. Beautiful! Your thoughts are pure and from the heart, as well a sign of writing ability. Isn't that what all beauty is, pure and from the heart?

[Awfulhabits]

i am SOO happy the way the poem turned out (just a dream), I felt sad then received a burst of hope at the end. Thank you so much for sharing this piece of work!!

[Spirit_Raven101]

thank you im happy you liked it :)

[Riley Justine]

A well-written poem with a very deep message. I loved it. It flowed very easily. Really well done! You could probably afford to read over it, however and adjust a couple words and punctuation. Otherwise, good job!

[Spirit_Raven101]

thank you im happy you liked it

[Ena Lona Kendra]

I enjoyed this poem. I'm adopted so I love my adoptive dad a lot because he took me. an ill mannered child and made me into this grown amazing woman, I respect my adoptive father but knowing he could die at any time kills me inside. I can relate to this poem. I respect you more as a writer then I respect most. Keep up the good word and I subscribed to you. I love your work :)

[Spirit_Raven101]

thank you so much, I love my father as he have always been there for me. He is a really strong peace of my life do to that and im always afraid of losing him. I'm thankful for every day i have my father whit me and hope he will stay there for a long time.

Again thank you for the wonderful review :)

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I love how to the point this piece is, how you created a flowing rhythm and were able to stick with it even when you had longer lines. I love that you took something everyone can relate to and somehow set it apart from the millions of other things about the same thing.

Interesting write.

[Spirit_Raven101]

I am happy you liked the poem

[Jamie R. Robillard Sr.]

Wonderful Poem, thanks for sharing

[Rene Salinas]

The passing of someone loved. It is never an easy moment. I was always taught to embrace death even at Church on Sunday how they always preach about letting the loved ones go but I just like you couldn't contain myself when the time came. You have managed to gather all the feelings until you realised that it was a dream and that made you reflect and tell those who you love that indeed you do love them because when they are gone it is too late.

A revelation

Thankyou

[Spirit_Raven101]

Thank you, i am happy you enjoy it. :)

[Malister Mikey]

This poem I remember you reading it to me I love it's rhyme scheme and love how you can feel how much you truly care for your father.