The gig's over

The gig's over

A Poem by Tony Jordan
"

Memories can be dissonant to the heart

"
Only 

twanging 
memories
via 
broken chords
and 
missing strings
remain 

the action 
got
too high ~
drew only 
blood

a ghostly refrain

repeats 
again
and 
again
and
again

© 2017 Tony Jordan


Author's Note

Tony Jordan
Capchta - fading !!

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Oh those twanging memories do tend to repeat again and again. I like the way you have written this poem- single words on a line have a great impact. Let's hope that the 'ghostly refrain' begins to fade (as the capchta says!) and the broken chords and missing strings can regenerate.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I was going to concretise this into a guitar body shape but got lazy lol. Glad you caught the captch.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

7 Years Ago

You are welcome.



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This is very simple but you've chosen a great metaphor to describe the damage caused by the tsunami waves spreading out from the cataclysm.
You are describing the human condition - we know its going to hurt but we can't help ourselves.
Cheers,
Alan

Posted 7 Years Ago


Oh those twanging memories do tend to repeat again and again. I like the way you have written this poem- single words on a line have a great impact. Let's hope that the 'ghostly refrain' begins to fade (as the capchta says!) and the broken chords and missing strings can regenerate.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I was going to concretise this into a guitar body shape but got lazy lol. Glad you caught the captch.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

7 Years Ago

You are welcome.
i guess it comes from the portals of our minds,feelings and memories

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Quite so W.M.
Thank you very much for the review.
Sounds full of regret for a life wasted in youth in dreaming about musical success and in drinking/drug taking. Love the way it echoes out and leaves the impression of lasting sorrow.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Thanks John. It could be a cumulative write - I've been reading a lot about pop/rock stars who've pa.. read more
A very bluesy poem indeed Tony maybe not the stairway to heaven but more of Don't you forget about me! A nice write matey!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Not the stairway to heaven at all Andrew mate - more a indictment of the music industry apparatchik... read more
Eerie words, Tony. Some of the "why's" of life are never answered, are they? We'd be better off forgetting the questions, but somehow can not manage to do that. Good one. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Thank you and I agree totally Lydia. I think it's akin to being told not to think of...say...Elephan.. read more
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Gee
G'day Tony. Well as Confucius once said, and I quote directly, " those fuckers that dwell on the past are mostly miserable, cynical c*~ts "
Not a very well known saying I might add......

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Haha - one of the idioms that didn't make it past the ancient censors then mate...lol.
Hey, y.. read more
Gee

7 Years Ago

Blue, BLUE, I'm bluer than Bernard Manning when talking al things black and women.....😎
Aloha Tony,

Sometimes in love, there seems to be a loop of unanswered why's...without answers... and yet, the why's continue... around and around in our minds...

I know as I have been there.

Lots of emotion in this one.

Alisa

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Thank you Alisa. I'm minded of an episode of the 1990s comedy Everybody Loves Raymond by your review.. read more
Alisa Js

7 Years Ago

lol

Working on the healed part... mobile part is working beter day by day...
<.. read more
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Good, good - glad to hear it, ditto...
x
The unwelcome sound of tragedy's echoes.
Brings to mind country music; a most appropriate metaphorical springboard.
Excellent poem!


Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I think there was a country song on the radio in the background when this came to mind Jimmy, come t.. read more
I think memories do that to you. It's like going back somewhere that held great thoughts in your head.
But then you find nothing you can relate to.
Thank god for drink.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I agree Paul. The memories are never spot on in any shape or form to the event - we frilly them up o.. read more

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