Ashen love

~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

The saddest sight

I never saw -

Your foot 

scrabbling remorsefully 

in the hearth

of our love

- cold ashes where

once a fire raged

which outshone 

the Sun

for us

Now spent -

bereft of any fuel

It died quickly

sending us spinning

like dark pulsars

to the opposite

ends of 

Life

Reviews

[lightsong]

Your style here reminds me with my own at some of my poems, You used one brilliant image, and left the range of emotions to be felt through each verse, though there is only gloominess and ultimate despair, emptiness... but You started with a plea, though it will hurt to see it... but somehow this little flicker of hope still hanging on there, up at the start.

Well written, I could feel the state when Love dies, Thank You*

[Tony Jordan]

self delusion unfortunately Light
thank you for reviewing this one
:)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are in fireplace mode dear boy I see. A nice use of the metaphor but be careful or Jacob will have you!

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - Jacob's lofty heights are in no jepoardy from the likes of me John. Lmao @ 'fireplace mode' - I feel I should be dressed as good old Val Doonican replete with turtle neck sweater...
cheers John :))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Maybe it really was your foot scrabbling 'playfully' ;) :P
'Like dark pulsars'.. hm interesting comparison.
Didn't know you could write sad stuff like this too, Tony. Still, nice reading it. And I like the structure :)

[Tony Jordan]

Lol - Im thinking, there's dark matter and why can't there be dark pulsars then. And I would not scrabble playfully in the hearth of love - not with my new trainers on ;p
Thanks Yumna :))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Then wait for 'em to get old 😛😉
You're welcome, TJ! 😊

[Tony Jordan]

I can't hang around THAT long to scrabble in the ashes of an old affair haha. A phoenix might come out of them and toast me!! =:o

[Dr. YumnaKay]

A pheonix?... Hmmmmm
Haha then I hope you get smothered in a new love affair soon lol 😛😛

[Tony Jordan]

Oooh you really don't like me do you... *wink*

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah something in you just kicked in, I think :p good to see the ol' Tony back ;)

[Tony Jordan]

Hmmm... ol' Tony...lmao
Okay I'll take that - since it's from you, I'll take that all day xD
Good to be back Yumna - cheers !

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Better ol' Tony than Uncle Tony hahah 😜😂
Cheers 🍻