Don't hit me again daddy

Don't hit me again daddy

A Poem by Tony Jordan
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Child Abuse

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My small hands crack
As I use them
To cover my head and face;
the thin belt is much worse
than the thick - 
it whips more and leaves deeper welts
Funny how my mind
takes off - leaving me behind
I think of how my body will
look with the new 'stripes'
I pretend I'm a tiger 
in the mirror - when 
the swelling goes down
and I wear my pain
for only me to see...

© 2017 Tony Jordan


Author's Note

Tony Jordan
Imagine this.
Tear it up.

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Painful to even read...
It's not an easy task to leave the reader teary-eyed, only after making them read I guess a poem of about 10-12 lines. You did that easily, or maybe not so easily, idk. Whatever it is, this poem is quite heartbreaking. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your words Zoe.
Zoya

7 Years Ago

no problem



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Hard to imagine, but written so well it makes it kind of easy. Powerful poem Tony.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Hard to recall - so long ago - it's almost like it happened to someone else.
Thank you E.M. <.. read more
Having had an abusive father, I understand this message well. You've definitely expressed the way it can feel from a child's point of view & also using very original ideas & expressions, such as the tiger stripes which are sparsely referred to here, but the imagery that conjures up is vivid & extensive. Great job planting the images in the reader's mind. (Sorry I've been gone from this website awhile . . . I've missed reading you!)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Great to see you back BG :))
Its so sad that so many can relate personally to this...
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barleygirl

7 Years Ago

I know what you mean . . . whenever I speak of my childhood abuse, there's always someone nearby who.. read more
Oh, my friend. I can see it, hear it, feel it, taste it. This is such all powerful poem. It is simple, it is so straight forward - until the end.

"and I wear my pain
for only me to see..."

This struck me right between the ribs. These words speak of the depth of abuse, the pain that lingers long after bruises fade, cuts heal, voices quiet. In my case, this was when the abuse truly began. Hide it wisely. If no one else can see it, it never really happened. If it never really happened, then I can be happy. I will hide and I will be happy.

Man, you absolutely tore me apart with this poem. Way too much to stuff into those lines, my friend. Thank you sharing it. It is hard to read, and I know, even harder to share.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Awesome! It's just amazing! Keep working at it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Thank you Shaded_Demon
(great avatar by the way)
unfortunately, i can relate all too well. don't know what else to say. i hate what life does to us ...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Nothing need be said Pete.
Thank you very much for reviewing this one.
I will never understand how someone could hit a child. The way you told this story, from the child, with his tiger stripes, just tears at the heart strings. Powerful writing Tony. Your words are haunting Julie

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I guess it could have been much worse Julie - at least I'm here to recall it - hard as it is to do s.. read more
i got the belt when i was a kid...but it was used wisely and only for real discipline purposes, not abuse...those who abuse their children...and there is a difference between, i believe...they are guilty of worse than murder.
powerful write, Tony.
j.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I got the strap at school and I understood the difference even then.
Thank you Jacob
Wow! Not sure what to say Tony other than Bravo! Desperate, but well written.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Desperate times...etc
Thank you for your admiration Nigel.
Oh, this is absolutely tragic. Written from the standpoint of the abuses child. The words sting almost as the belt would. Powerful poetry, Tony. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Thank you Lydia - I appreciate you.
You capture the isolation of such things Tony as the child only has an inner world to take refuge in. The atmosphere you have created in this brutal, stark open verse is really excellent.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I never thought of that Skib.
I already put away the weeks, no the month's quota of chocolat.. read more
Skib

7 Years Ago

Hahaha. *Raises Chocolate Egg* Cheers to a happy life. :p
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Haha - Slainte Skib... :DD

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