Don't hit me again daddy

Don't hit me again daddy

A Poem by Tony Jordan
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Child Abuse

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My small hands crack
As I use them
To cover my head and face;
the thin belt is much worse
than the thick - 
it whips more and leaves deeper welts
Funny how my mind
takes off - leaving me behind
I think of how my body will
look with the new 'stripes'
I pretend I'm a tiger 
in the mirror - when 
the swelling goes down
and I wear my pain
for only me to see...

© 2017 Tony Jordan


Author's Note

Tony Jordan
Imagine this.
Tear it up.

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Painful to even read...
It's not an easy task to leave the reader teary-eyed, only after making them read I guess a poem of about 10-12 lines. You did that easily, or maybe not so easily, idk. Whatever it is, this poem is quite heartbreaking. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your words Zoe.
Zoya

7 Years Ago

no problem



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:( This really hurt my heart, powerfully sad read!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Enchanted-Raven

7 Years Ago

awww I remember the feel of a belt from time to time...but then I was a chopsy kid
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

heh heh - my friend and I would compare the stripes - he got it with an old electrical flex - the wo.. read more
Enchanted-Raven

7 Years Ago

The bean pole sticks that made a whoosh before it hit.....ahh memories lol
New stripes.. My goodness I adore this. I'm speechless. Thank you for writing.. Writing is an outlet, and it's a safe zone for those who feel they could never say things out loud.



Posted 7 Years Ago


Poignant. Seems to be flirting with someones actual thoughts. A sign of good writing is if it makes you uncomfortable. And this does.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Tragic.
Violence committed against children was, unfortunately, rather commonplace in the generation previous to mine.
Distressingly vivid depiction, Tony!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really do love your poems Tony. You show us practical examples of life from darkness to brightness, no fiction, no fantasy just reality and that's the reason why it leaves a mark on our hearts. A very powerful read and highly recommended. Thank you for sharing it

Posted 7 Years Ago


yes, it is hard to understand these things. Sometimes, I think, if we try to understand (That is to see things from the other's point of view), and can see 'where they are coming from', it does help a bit. Perhaps your dad just did not know what else to do? but it is very hard for the victim. I thought your poem said it very clearly.... and poetically! Good for you.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Aww deeply felt - I love how descriptive you were and my heart went out to you as well :(

Posted 7 Years Ago


brings back memories my bio did this to me

Posted 7 Years Ago


Such a riveting read, Tony. It's hard to believe someone bigger and stronger would intentionally take their aggressions out on a helpless, innocent child.

The story you composed this into is a must read. Thank you for posting it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

And the irony is that it revealed to even me, a child, how weak he really was. I lost all respect fo.. read more
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Nice storytelling, Mr. Jordan.

The perspective is well done; you took an unconvential, hard-to-look-at subject matter and painted it from the perspective of a child as if experienced first handedly... each line leaves one to ponder the incident as the story progresses smoothly, expanding the awareness and emotional understanding of such aspect of life.

Nice job, Man.

Much love,

LR

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Not exactly a fictional story LR but more of a memory told as a story poem ...
Thank you my f.. read more

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