It happened

It happened

A Poem by Tony Jordan
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The day she said 'it's over'...

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When my life paused
when my blood froze
when the dam in my eyes burst
when the world reverted into a frightening place
when                          re-filled the void
when I lowered my head again
when I felt so lonely
when you said goodbye

© 2017 Tony Jordan


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There is nothing like that emptiness when you lose someone, whether its from a love union that's run its course, or a loved one passing...it's so hard to let go and face each day knowing their life force will not be a part of your world anymore. Your words are simple, but poignant. They touch the heart like an uber sharp pin, pricking just enough to draw that glistening drop of blood. Well penned, my friend.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I invest it all Pam. I'm the guy at the roulette wheel or at the craps table shoving all the chips o.. read more



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This is heart wrenching! Tons of emotion here! And it brought tons emotion to me! Amazing job! This is about a break up I believe but it works for death too that is what it brought to my mind. But...break ups do feel like death so...well captured and expressed!
Tabby

Posted 7 Years Ago


There is nothing like that emptiness when you lose someone, whether its from a love union that's run its course, or a loved one passing...it's so hard to let go and face each day knowing their life force will not be a part of your world anymore. Your words are simple, but poignant. They touch the heart like an uber sharp pin, pricking just enough to draw that glistening drop of blood. Well penned, my friend.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I invest it all Pam. I'm the guy at the roulette wheel or at the craps table shoving all the chips o.. read more
Short but so dark and powerful! Great job on this one, TJ! I really like it :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

You're always welcome Gullia.
Sorry it took so long to reply ;)

I appreciate y.. read more
i love everything about this poem, the choice of words, lay out; everything. It also makes me feel guilty because as a female, i was always the one saying 'goodybye'...btw i don't want to be rude but i was notified you gave me a review and it's not coming up? maybe it got deleted? anyways good work, i'm checking the rest out too

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I'm sorry that you deleted my review Roxana. I can't think why?
Was I too terse? If so I apol.. read more
Short but paralyzing. When the world reverted to a frighting place..in many ways it does.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Yeah - the dark returned with vengeance
Thank you for reviewing this one Alex
:)
The reader will connect with this on so many levels. I know I did. Sad but written with remarkable insight my friend.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Wil see us over here, us Belfast folk? We spake a bit like yerselves - but wir no class - cuz wer ju.. read more
Ken Simm.

7 Years Ago

A Belfast mate was always sayin "Stickin owt" Whatever that meant. Me I'm pure Lanky, except me Mum .. read more
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Stickin out was a lower middle-class term for things being good or great. I never heard it said 'rou.. read more
this is one of those things that i understand, but then also realize i may have no right to. Through your words i can see that you are stunned. so i guess that makes this a stunning poem!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Yup - stunned is right M.P.
Sorry it's taken so long to reply.
Thank you for your wor.. read more
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Hmmm. The sorrow of a parting lover; always a difficult time.

I usually don't fancy constant repetition of words in a piece, but in this case it seems to add more emotion and poignancy to the poem.

A nice little write, Tony. Something we can all relate to.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Hi Doodley - good to see you - my apologies for the tardiness in thanking you for your review of thi.. read more
You nailed it. I can feel it. Very powerful writing Tony.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I hope you're well E.M
Sorry its taken a week to thank you for your review - I do appreciate .. read more
Enigma Monster

7 Years Ago

Don't be silly, you don't need to apologize for not saying thanks:)

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Added on February 13, 2017
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