There is nothing like that emptiness when you lose someone, whether its from a love union that's run its course, or a loved one passing...it's so hard to let go and face each day knowing their life force will not be a part of your world anymore. Your words are simple, but poignant. They touch the heart like an uber sharp pin, pricking just enough to draw that glistening drop of blood. Well penned, my friend.
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7 Years Ago
I invest it all Pam. I'm the guy at the roulette wheel or at the craps table shoving all the chips o.. read moreI invest it all Pam. I'm the guy at the roulette wheel or at the craps table shoving all the chips onto one number - but not that good at losing nor letting go nor revisiting the pain. Getting there - a wee bit at a time though - as we all do.
Thank you dear Pam - it's great to see you !
:))
This is heart wrenching! Tons of emotion here! And it brought tons emotion to me! Amazing job! This is about a break up I believe but it works for death too that is what it brought to my mind. But...break ups do feel like death so...well captured and expressed!
Tabby
There is nothing like that emptiness when you lose someone, whether its from a love union that's run its course, or a loved one passing...it's so hard to let go and face each day knowing their life force will not be a part of your world anymore. Your words are simple, but poignant. They touch the heart like an uber sharp pin, pricking just enough to draw that glistening drop of blood. Well penned, my friend.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I invest it all Pam. I'm the guy at the roulette wheel or at the craps table shoving all the chips o.. read moreI invest it all Pam. I'm the guy at the roulette wheel or at the craps table shoving all the chips onto one number - but not that good at losing nor letting go nor revisiting the pain. Getting there - a wee bit at a time though - as we all do.
Thank you dear Pam - it's great to see you !
:))
i love everything about this poem, the choice of words, lay out; everything. It also makes me feel guilty because as a female, i was always the one saying 'goodybye'...btw i don't want to be rude but i was notified you gave me a review and it's not coming up? maybe it got deleted? anyways good work, i'm checking the rest out too
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7 Years Ago
I'm sorry that you deleted my review Roxana. I can't think why?
Was I too terse? If so I apol.. read moreI'm sorry that you deleted my review Roxana. I can't think why?
Was I too terse? If so I apologise.
Feel free to check out the rest - Thanks for the warning lol xD
The reader will connect with this on so many levels. I know I did. Sad but written with remarkable insight my friend.
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7 Years Ago
Your a gentleman and a scholar - I mean that Ken
Thanks
Sorry for taking this long to .. read moreYour a gentleman and a scholar - I mean that Ken
Thanks
Sorry for taking this long to reply.
:)
7 Years Ago
Ah go away wi yer. You are more than welcome an didnae fesh yerself.
7 Years Ago
Irvine Welsh - I love your stuff !!
I love when you spraff about the port and the barry town.. read moreIrvine Welsh - I love your stuff !!
I love when you spraff about the port and the barry town of Leith
7 Years Ago
De ye mind its the William Mcgonnigall you'll be after nae bother.
Oh glorious bridge over th.. read moreDe ye mind its the William Mcgonnigall you'll be after nae bother.
Oh glorious bridge over the river Tay!
Wil see us over here, us Belfast folk? We spake a bit like yerselves - but wir no class - cuz wer ju.. read moreWil see us over here, us Belfast folk? We spake a bit like yerselves - but wir no class - cuz wer just pure ruff - ruff as sin.
I'm busted on pancakes mate. lol
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A Belfast mate was always sayin "Stickin owt" Whatever that meant. Me I'm pure Lanky, except me Mum .. read moreA Belfast mate was always sayin "Stickin owt" Whatever that meant. Me I'm pure Lanky, except me Mum was Yorkshire but we dont' mention that. So me it was all thee's and thous until I was about 14. Tha's abart as much use as yon one legged mun in an arse kickin contest. Was typical. So you think you are ruff.
William Mcgonnigall was the worst poet in the world and a great favourite of Spike Milligan.
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Stickin out was a lower middle-class term for things being good or great. I never heard it said 'rou.. read moreStickin out was a lower middle-class term for things being good or great. I never heard it said 'round my way' lol. We would say 'sound as a pound' or 'dead on' for the same sentiment. Stickin out and 'Bout ye?' were two terms that were acceptable to and adopted by the N.I. Tourist Board as 'Norn Iron spake.'
I loved the 'thees' and 'thous' of Last of The Summer Wine. I found it hard to follow sometimes though. We can be totally understandable if we slow down our way of talking to a crawl and stop sounding so irate lol.
Got that McGonnigall message - he was bold as brass wasn't he? No wonder he tickled Spike.
this is one of those things that i understand, but then also realize i may have no right to. Through your words i can see that you are stunned. so i guess that makes this a stunning poem!
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7 Years Ago
Yup - stunned is right M.P.
Sorry it's taken so long to reply.
Thank you for your wor.. read moreYup - stunned is right M.P.
Sorry it's taken so long to reply.
Thank you for your words my friend.
:)
Hmmm. The sorrow of a parting lover; always a difficult time.
I usually don't fancy constant repetition of words in a piece, but in this case it seems to add more emotion and poignancy to the poem.
A nice little write, Tony. Something we can all relate to.
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7 Years Ago
Hi Doodley - good to see you - my apologies for the tardiness in thanking you for your review of thi.. read moreHi Doodley - good to see you - my apologies for the tardiness in thanking you for your review of this one. I know sometimes repitition can grate, it does for me too at times.
Thank you so much.
:)
You nailed it. I can feel it. Very powerful writing Tony.
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7 Years Ago
I hope you're well E.M
Sorry its taken a week to thank you for your review - I do appreciate .. read moreI hope you're well E.M
Sorry its taken a week to thank you for your review - I do appreciate you.
:)
7 Years Ago
Don't be silly, you don't need to apologize for not saying thanks:)
Just writing to get it out
My avatar is an actual slice of an onion that I cut up and I kept and froze - it reminds me of the saying - If you don't laugh, you cry. more..