It happened

The day she said 'it's over'...

When my life paused

when my blood froze

when the dam in my eyes burst

when the world reverted into a frightening place

when                          re-filled the void

when I lowered my head again

when I felt so lonely

when you said goodbye

Reviews

[ReedWrite]

There is nothing like that emptiness when you lose someone, whether its from a love union that's run its course, or a loved one passing...it's so hard to let go and face each day knowing their life force will not be a part of your world anymore. Your words are simple, but poignant. They touch the heart like an uber sharp pin, pricking just enough to draw that glistening drop of blood. Well penned, my friend.

[Tony Jordan]

I invest it all Pam. I'm the guy at the roulette wheel or at the craps table shoving all the chips onto one number - but not that good at losing nor letting go nor revisiting the pain. Getting there - a wee bit at a time though - as we all do.
Thank you dear Pam - it's great to see you !
:))

[Tom Float]

I'm glad this is the first poem I read. This captures something quite visceral about this exact event. It feels as though so much should be said, yet, only a small number of words is not only necessary, but demanded, to communicate the powerful emotion. Nicely written.

[andrew mitchell]

one is never ready for the bitter pill esp if blindsided, its unfortunate we have to take this medicine in order to move on. hang in there chum.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not sure why I don't see you posting Tone, but this is such a heartfelt piece I only came upon on my live stream. Stark, sad and full of regret.

[Kathryn Smith]

Awww Tony. :( I feel you! This is really well written. xx Keep your head up mate.

[Tony Jordan]

Thanks Kat.
(hugs)

[Jimmy Yetts]

It is best that dark day is quickly forgotten; sadly, no such form of blessed amnesia seems likely to occur.
Unless she eventually decides to say "hello," again, the poet is forced to somehow live with her goodbye.
Bitter pill, Tony.

[Tony Jordan]

the bitterest pill I've had to swallow Jimmy.
Thanks for you understanding words.

[Enchanted-Raven]

I think we have all felt something like this at some point in our lives....it sux...expressed perfectly :) x

[Mr.Writer]

Awe... my heart melted at this Tony! Why, such a great, sad poem you've written.
Keep it up!

[Pete]

brutally painful. i could feel the hurt in this. like the void in the middle - good effect. frighteningly realistic. well written with great imagery Tony.

[duff]

The lines are like sharp daggers being thrown one after another keeping the reader focused at all times. Attention grabbing stuff. Nice job

[Tbear]

I pray the sadness only lasted as long as this poem. Such a picture you did paint of grief and despair.. thank you for sharing,,write on..