Cast the first

Cast the first

A Poem by Tony Jordan
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free verse - Warning - deals with suicide

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They line up
With their stones
I am buried 
to my chest
in their disdain
I don't fear 
this death.

Together
professionals
friends 
family 
start hurling
their
'accusations'.

As my lights
dim
under the 
barrage
My main thought is
- how
can I be accused 
of 
'trying to end my life'?
'
'
~ to me~
it never 
began.

© 2017 Tony Jordan


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"how can I be accused of trying to end my life? to me it never began."
Holy crap, that got me. This is so painfully accurate. Applause.

Posted 7 Years Ago


A very powerful poem especially the ending. I like the imagery of being buried as it evokes a feeling of true suffocation.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Greatly penned Tony
When mind is not sane, how can we analyze it whether it is right or wrong. No one has the right to blame such people who goes through such phase of life. Staying sane is a bliss and to be able to fight out suicidal tendencies and depression is an achievement in itself. This is a great insightful piece of work.
A free verse written very impact-fully. Loved everything about this writing.
Keep it up.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Interesting and yes it is curious when you are under stress and the help often does more harm than good.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Sometimes help only constructs another copse of trees in front of the forest Will, you're right my f.. read more
Wow I can relate to this, i love it :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Two things Shorty.
First, I'm sorry you can relate (if you catch my drift).
Second, I'.. read more
Shorty28

7 Years Ago

Thank you :) i love piece like this :) your welcome
Heartbreakingly sad subject. I lost a very close friend to suicide and I don't think I will ever get over it. There is always a reason to live...a reason to fight the demons. LydI**

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I'm sorry that you experienced that Lydia. (hugs)
It leaves so many questions.
Thankf.. read more
Beautifully dark and sad in its theme. Weirdly enough I really tend to enjoy the dark themes in this poem. I've just always been drawn to the darker side of human nature and its effects and repercussions.

Very well done, Moon Face! ;)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

That's quite alright Lovecraft.
I appreciate your visit on this one, and anything I write. T.. read more
Lovecraft

7 Years Ago

Well, I know I am a little strange, but then again I think everyone is in their own unique way. ;)
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

I agree 100% my friend.
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I think it might perfectly reflect the ongoings of someone's brain who feels overwhelmed by this world. I said might on purpose because who am I to dare to know, because I never felt as desperate and rolled over by all of it. I can relate though to a feeling of non-belonging. Simply expressed yet goes deep.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Wow - it just goes to show, never judge a book Βανέ. I had you pegged for a outgoing and popular.. read more
V

7 Years Ago

We're more broken inside then it's shown on the surface.
I guess it's often like this, build.. read more
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

So true...
Welcome :)
This poem is crying out to be heard. Well done for writing it,

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

If you think that Aunt Astri then I promise i will read it one day at the local suicide awareness gr.. read more
wow! i am struck to muted silence .. powerful powerful powerful poem ..the turn is brilliant says i! something we all need to hear ...whether suicide has touched us personally or not ..well done ..should be published says i!
E.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

Thank you E!
I appreciate your words.
:)

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Added on January 29, 2017
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Tony Jordan
Tony Jordan

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