Wow

A beautiful woman

She sells

mascara 

with eyes 

attached

Smokey dilations;

stealing third base

Pastel backdrops 

to Never

Neverland

Brushing all aside

Huge lashes

Drawing 

digits aside

Uma Thurman-like

Pulping out fiction

In pants so tight

You can see

her 

pulse

Men cry;

cry themselves 

to sleep

- her in mind.

Author's Note

captcha shocker !! lol

Reviews

[Alisa Js]

Hello Tony,

Some women are to die for... while this is true, there are some absolutely beautiful men out there that have the same effect on women.

And by beautiful, I mean so beautifully handsome... you just have to stop and stare...

I enjoyed this one...

Wishing you well.

Alisa

[Tony Jordan]

So true Alisa - sauce for the goose...
Thank you for your wee visit - always welcome
:)

[aLittlePain]

Some superb lines TJ, great word play!
I love it!

She certainly has that thing or I should say she thinks she does....they usually have a carnal/shallow focus when it comes to attraction.
Stay the hell away from her I say.
R xo

[Tony Jordan]

Yeah, they usually flit too much for real relationships - perhaps out of fear of commitment -who knows.
I don't have anyone like her near me to stay the hell away from Rach !! lmao
Thank you for your super review.
:)

[Papaya]

Some women just have an allure that is hard to resist and men fall hard. Other women hate women like that. This poem has many great lines and I think it really shows how superficial attraction can be.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you Papaya. Yeah, I think the shallow nature of this kind of attraction is like the angler fishs' neon lure. Almost always going to lead to the demise of the unwary. The wiser and the tested see it for what it is and steer clear.
:)

[Ken Simm.]

Totally unrelated but it popped into my mind whilst reading this.... I once saw a sign, truly, that said ear piercing while you wait.
Ahem... Any road up as they were wont to say in my old neck of the woods.
Perhaps I used to think of women like this, perhaps I used to dream of women like this, perhaps I drooled over women like this, (ok Diana Rigg and Felicity Kendal. I know you are too young. And Catherine Deneuve and I suppose and the lead singer in Curved Air Sonia Kristina and and I think I'm going to have to sit down. Oh I am sitting down) But do I still do this ...... er. Do I still do this..... er still do this. Sorry I was miles away then. what were we talking about?
Incidentally I was humming the old Peter Sarstedt song 'Where do you go to my lovely' in my head.
I wish I could do humour like what you do and still make a point about mysogeny.

[Tony Jordan]

You could leave your ear and go for a dander, that's forward thinking...like garlic breaaad.
I do recall Miss Rigg and then Felicity too but I liked her snobbish counterpart who turned into the lady of the manor born.
Then the girl on the Tennents can was worth a good fight on a Friday night over too. Say "I wanna be a juror on a rural brewery robbery case" fast.


Poor Peter died this month my lovely.
RIP Pete. I liked his style. His and Demis Roussos.

[Ken Simm.]

Demis Rousoous was in a band with Vangelis called Aprodites child. I still have one of their albums 666. notorious because it was banned.

[Tony Jordan]

No way. With Vangelis ..? Wow!
Demis was huge (figuratviely speaking) when I was a kid - he was on The Two Ronnies, Top of the Pops, chat shows, the heap.

[Ken Simm.]

The album was banned because of a song that totally comprised of Demis singing I'm come. I'm come, I am to come.
In his high falsetto it sounded really strange. Before he went totally MOR of course.

[Tony Jordan]

So he blazed the trail for FGTH with their song Relax in a way. The refrain was a big old squirty sound effect and the long 'come' spoken. That was banned but it was in the 80's !!

[Tony Jordan]

I would argue that J'taime was more - whats the word - mmm... evocative with its groaning and moaning lol

[Ken Simm.]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YQyxCL1uMlU

[Ken Simm.]

Wasn't Demis singing on the controversial track I now remember it was Irene Papas. I've not played the album in years and years because a( it is very scratched and warped and b) I don't have a turntable anymore. Perhaps I should think about getting one. I don't think it is available anywhere on any other format but I will check.
"∞" ("Infinity"), the most controversial song on the album, consists of Irene Papas chanting "I was, I am, I am to come" over a sparse percussion track, gradually building into an orgasmic frenzy. Vangelis described the track as conveying "the pain of birth and the joy of intercourse."[3][12] Ferris originally sought a narrator with a heavy British accent to recite the lyric, in order to create a contrast with the climactic frenzy, but Papas' improvisation was chosen instead because it made a stronger impression.[5] Hegarty and Halliwell describe the song as part of the "increased cacophony" that marks the progression towards the apocalypse.[34] Melody Maker remarked in 1972 that in light of the publicity received by Serge Gainsbourg's "Je t'aime... moi non plus", it was "odd" that the media overlooked 666, but that it would have been a "pity" if it achieved notoriety solely due to Papas' contribution.[3] A sample of Papas taking sharp breaths was used in Enigma's "Principles Of Lust".[36]

[Ken Simm.]

And I love J'taime. Keth and I played it constantly whilst doing the murals for Warwick Rd Studios in the seventies. Another I've not heard in ages. But I have it on CD somewhere. I will dig it out.

[Ken Simm.]

apparently it has been rereleased and can be got on Amazon. I will listen again before I commit myself. It was somewhat unusual and I was well into Progressive stuff in 1972 and I thought it was a bit too much for me.

[Tony Jordan]

Nice one Ken.

Lately I am been most listening to - a band from Paris with a real Coffee shop vibe. Stripped down acoustic versions of 80's classics.
The whole feel is so laid back.
They're called Nouvelle Vague.
All their tracks are on YouTube.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V8olS_ROzrk

[winter;lyra]

I was just going to read manga, but I found something else to entertain me, you're funny onion-person, expect me.
Also, I can't believe I actually found something here I can't fully understand, this poem I mean - i love it

[Tony Jordan]

Winter - you're always welcome.
I can't fully understand this one myself.
Thanks for visiting but don't feel obliged to return reviews when i review yours- that's not what I'm about.
:))

[winter;lyra]

eh... "review for review" is a practice i'm highly against in this world, trust me

[Tony Jordan]

That's cool. :)

[Gee]

I'm not, tee hee hee hee, remember this..."a wigwam bam gonna make you my man, a wigwam bam..." Morning, splendiferous my fiend, us shallow folk love writing like this.

[Tony Jordan]

I remember it being on't radiogram when I was an eye in my father's twinkle
Morning my good man
I see you have Saturday morning fever lol

Danke Gee...
:)

[Gee]

I do, just cooking sausage, egg and bacon for the apple of...been out with the pooch, paperwork and flitting in and out of here. Curtis, Jack and Oswald have reappeared..

[Tony Jordan]

aww - I want one of you for my Saturday mornings Gee.
I can't wait to see what the little tyke is up to - be right over...

[Gee]

Lol, doors always open my friend, always..

[mercy party]

the ending could say "in her mind". that would change the illusion quick. That is what i got out of it, she might just be a sad case of yesterdays news. Maybe in reality men just yawn.
I liked the poem so much! cool.

[Tony Jordan]

Yeah, I like that idea M.P.
I don't know if it's just in her mind or if guys' still cry over her.
Bit of work needed methinks.
Thank you for your constructive review my friend.
:)

[mercy party]

you are welcome. and by no means do think it needs work. i think its great! if a reader can dive into your character so much that they make there own alternate ending you are basically kicking serious a*s with your poems.! do what you do!!!

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you - what a great thing to say.
:)

[FIN]

I see your play on words you did there, Mr. Movie Reference. (;

Much love,

LR

[Tony Jordan]

Lol
Thank you L.R.
:))

[ReedWrite]

Love it...this is an interesting one.
I love the line...Pastel backdrops
to Never/Neverland

Oh hell, I love all the lines, actually. I'm not sure if you meant it that way (and I suspect you did), or if it's just me reading inbetween the lines...but this poem speaks volumes...about the vacant, mindless, sex-centered focus of some women...and in their own minds, they see themselves are gorgeous, desirable...they see men crying themselves to sleep with unrequited desire.

Then again...maybe that's not at all what you're saying...lol. At any rate, I love the thought and word choice and flow of this one. Nicely done!

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - '..Oh hell, I love all the lines, actually.' - Pammy you kookie krispy kreme - you're lush!read moreHaha - '..Oh hell, I love all the lines, actually.' - Pammy you kookie krispy kreme - you're lush!

This started as a straight forward ode to those women who are beautiful and they know it - those with zero humility but then it morphed into a condemnation of same.
Best plans of Tony's and men and all that...

Love your wee visits.
Thank you very much.
:))

[ReedWrite]

LOL...so now I'm a krispy Kreme? Good to know. I love the statement in your poem...it's not condemnation...it's an honest view. One I've shared on occasion. Male or female...there are those out there that feel removed from the plebeian masses...they imagine all us lesser mortals adore them...and some of us do, I suppose.

[Tony Jordan]

Hormones and drink make us like them more...
or like ourselves less.

[Tony Jordan]

Cool - I'm getting targeted by ads for Caviar...

[Valentine]

All one sees lately on a female are eyelashes galore and I mean galore. Guess the new brand does not run all over like the old. Valentine

[Tony Jordan]

I love P***y Galore. ;)
I think the new lashes are actually glued on and the mascara is bullet-proof.
A new breed of femme fatale Kathie.
Thanks for always reviewing my writing.
I appreciate it very much.
;)

[D Connolly]

Sounds like a bombshell! I had to read it twice because in my mind I mixed the words up and it came out with a totally different message LOL! Example, the last line I read "In her mind" and not "her in mind" and it changed everything. I think you've used interesting choices of words in several parts; notably the first line "she sells" as if she were a product, and also the visualization of her pulse in her pants :)

[Tony Jordan]

yayy - the review window popped up to reply to you D.
I am debating about the 'sells' aspect. May change that thanks.
The mind statement is causing some confusion (even with me lol). Thanks for reviewin this one D.

[Stan Lee]

I did the same! I read 'in her mind' oops. I agree with D. Objectifying as there is no detail apart from physical appearance but I liked the choice of words. Smokey dilations was a nice one!

[Tony Jordan]

Andronicus don't worry about it - I did it too !
What is with this poem lol.
Honestly, when I re-read it the first time after publishing, in order to respond to Dani's comment, that is the way I read it.
Perhaps we've hit upon a reading optical illusion of sorts. lol