Wow

A beautiful woman

She sells

mascara 

with eyes 

attached

Smokey dilations;

stealing third base

Pastel backdrops 

to Never

Neverland

Brushing all aside

Huge lashes

Drawing 

digits aside

Uma Thurman-like

Pulping out fiction

In pants so tight

You can see

her 

pulse

Men cry;

cry themselves 

to sleep

- her in mind.

Author's Note

captcha shocker !! lol

Reviews

[Alisa Js]

Hello Tony,

Some women are to die for... while this is true, there are some absolutely beautiful men out there that have the same effect on women.

And by beautiful, I mean so beautifully handsome... you just have to stop and stare...

I enjoyed this one...

Wishing you well.

Alisa

[Tony Jordan]

So true Alisa - sauce for the goose...
Thank you for your wee visit - always welcome
:)

[Shabeeh Haider]

The title of this poem is all that I can write as a comment here. "WOW"

[Tony Jordan]

I'll take 'WOW' anytime Shabeeh, my friend.
Thank you !!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love this piece...the reference to Uma works great...and i really like the selling of mascara with the eyes attached...some women are hard to look at...not because they aren't attractive but because they are so attractive, we tend to stare...so we look away and visualize in the mind.

j.

[Tony Jordan]

Some are intimidatingly beautiful - or maybe that's just my low self-esteem eking out lol.
Thank you Jacob.
I always appreciate your reviews my friend.

[ern]

Wow this women sounds amazing. The fact that people literally cry over people like that amazes me sometimes. Keep writing.

[Tony Jordan]

Ah Nicki sadly one day it will happen to you too. Speaking philosophically - It's like a wheel-barrow - its in front of you my friend, it's in front of you.
Thank you by the way :))

[ern]

You're welcome Tony.

[Brett Hernan]

'-Her in mind'
and who hasn't shed a tear yet?
There's reality in the description of those lashes that hits the imagination like a typhoon when you look below them and then actually into the liquidity of her eyes.
Great work!

[Tony Jordan]

thank you Brett for the very engaging review - I appreciate your visit and your words.

[Ardra]

she does sound like a hot bomshell... haha sometimes even we tend to look at some and wonder what a sight ... are we straight ;)

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - well now I know I succeeded - Thank you Ria

[Chidoriflower]

This is a good description of a femme fatale; it's creative and the imagery is good. But the structure isn't very fluid. Thank you for sharing.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you Chidoriflower - as a rhymer converted to free verse I agree wholeheartedly with the fluidity. Thank you for your constructive criticism. I will get there (I hope lol).
Thank you again
:))

[Willard Wells]

OK, made me laugh. Fun piece. Like your imagery. I think I'm in lust, doesn't feel like love.

[Tony Jordan]

She's not one that will be coming home to meet my momma anyways Will - *wink*
Thank you my friend.
;D

[Lyn Anderson]

I love this - sensual and adoring, alluring and captivating. One small suggestion, to move to Never to next stanza for a smoother break

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you KL
I truly appreciate your helpful review my friend.
:)

[AYVID N]

Some women are divas. Its a picture they create, an illusion of unattainable beauty. The more distant she stays, the more she plays on men's mind. The trick is never to come too close. The concluding lines just blew me away. To me, this is one of your best poems ever.

[Tony Jordan]

I agree wholeheartedly DIVYA, a good distance is best - admire from there - this Icarus has little enough feathers left haha.
You're review is so kind - thank you my friend
:))

[AYVID N]

You are most welcom ☺

[andrew mitchell]

The title made me ponder on Kate Bush either a song or title of an album. Many goddesses of the screen had the wow factor like bardot and any of the bond ladies. A poem that has finesse Tony, written all over it!

[Tony Jordan]

Kate is a one of a kind Andrew, eh?
Thank you for commenting my friend.
;)