Foreclosing

Our precious

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The Moon is silver

The Sun is gold

Stars are diamonds

Yet the Earth's been sold...

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Author's Note

what do you think of the dialeks?

captcha - measles - lmao

Reviews

[Shy Joe]

Now this is something...These are my favorite kind of poems to read. Short, sounds like a verse in a song, and tells a story we can all relate to.

This made me think of an astronaut, un-tethered and free floating in space. He looks around at the vast spectacles of space in awe of its glistening ore, but then he looks down at the luscious Earth below his feet and see's a parasitic mob just gouging the hell out of it.

I enjoyed your poem! Thanks for sharing.

[Tony Jordan]

Amazing imagery in your review Shy Joe.
I loved it!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Money makes the world go round for sure....and the older I get, the more I see it all around me. Lydi**

[Tony Jordan]

8 guys have more money than half the world's poor.
Something is very wrong.
Thank you for reviewing this one Lydia.
:)

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Awesome TJ love this. Starz x

[Tony Jordan]

Well as it says here Starz - you are a diamond.
Thank you for dropping by on your way around the Universe.
:)

[mercy party]

so not only has poor earth been sold out by his companions, NASA just recently discovered and confirmed a new moon. looks like earth needs to take up poetry.

[Tony Jordan]

no wayy!!
That's brilliant. What fun we can have now with two of the buggers.
Thank you m.P.

[Warrior]

I like the description. The sun is yellow, so you use gold, the moon is grey so you use silver. And then you finish off with about the world being sold. It can serve as an allegory. I like it.

[Tony Jordan]

I think gold and silver for the sun and moon are very old poetry tropes. It was a quiz show question on TV (heavenly body is usually associated with the precious metal, silver?) that spurred this write B-law.
Thank you for reviewing this one. I appreciate it.
:)

[FIN]

Wow. Succinct. Clear and unfortunately true (for now, atleast). My new favorite poem, on here.

Much love,

LR

P.S.
Capitalize "Moon"

[Tony Jordan]

woop woop
thanks LR

Will do...
:D