Foreclosing

Our precious

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The Moon is silver

The Sun is gold

Stars are diamonds

Yet the Earth's been sold...

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Author's Note

what do you think of the dialeks?

captcha - measles - lmao

Reviews

[Shy Joe]

Now this is something...These are my favorite kind of poems to read. Short, sounds like a verse in a song, and tells a story we can all relate to.

This made me think of an astronaut, un-tethered and free floating in space. He looks around at the vast spectacles of space in awe of its glistening ore, but then he looks down at the luscious Earth below his feet and see's a parasitic mob just gouging the hell out of it.

I enjoyed your poem! Thanks for sharing.

[Tony Jordan]

Amazing imagery in your review Shy Joe.
I loved it!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
:)

[Tbear]

A vast amount of wisdom in 4 simple lines.

[Lovecraft]

A comment on how much we value this universe yet how we neglect the one thing that should be of utmost importance to everyone.

The universe is a ring with various gems but the center stone is somehow missing...

The spareness works very well for this poem.

Good job yet again, Weird Moon!

[Pete]

thought provoking. man acts as if it will last forever amidst exploitation of its resources. once they are gone, they are gone. the earth is resilient but has its limits. a mouthful with not many words and well put. catchy title.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I don't think I can explain in words the simple complexity that I feel when I read this little treasure. With your permission I think I will write it on the chalk board in my kitchen for my children to read and study this week for English lit.It is very pertinent to the being of our wholeness at the moment.

[ern]

It's really sad how much mankind has destroyed earth. The ending really leaves lots of room for thought.

[Tony Jordan]

Everyone who has commented has their own thoughts about the way the world has been abused and it shows that everyone has a real connection with Mother Earth, I think anyway.
I'm glad you reviewed this one Nicki.
Thank you very much my friend.
:)

[ern]

That is a good point. You're welcome. :)

[Rynn]

It's definitely thought provoking.
It tackles the difficult situation of people viewing natural parts of the earth as valuable in all the wrong ways. Something to be sold instead of protected. Short but well said.


Well done.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you Rynn. It's a free for all now. Everyone wants resources and they're willing to go to war for them.

[Alisa Js]

Hmmm...

This one is interesting in that it sounds like something a wise master would share with his students about the secret meaning of life...

... sharing with them 'wisdom keys'

Well done, you!

Alisa

[Tony Jordan]

As my old mum would often quip - 'There are much wiser locked up.' - she had a fierce dark humour lol.

'wisdom keys' is a beautifully evocative phrase, I like that very much.
Thank you again Alisa.
Great to see you.
Take care
x

[Alisa Js]

Your mother sounds very wise...

Wishing you well.

Alisa

[Tony Jordan]

Oh she is - and she could give her big son a dead arm still... lmao

[Alisa Js]

Mothers are indeed heart treasures, in every aspect... the good, the bad and well, you get the rest..

lol

Alisa ;-)

[Lana Huskins]

This is just beautiful! Short, to the point, and easily understandable.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you Lana, I appreciate your kind review.
:)

[Lana Huskins]

Always kind. :)